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Mutiny On The Bunte Kuh - Change to Chapter 7

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One of the reasons I don't immediately post an entire story, even though it is ostensibly finished: Readers make suggestions that enhance what I've written.

For example, a comment today cause me to modify a paragraph in chapter 7. I added two sentences that, to me at least, better explained Tuull bravery. They aren't pacifist as we think of pacifism, they simply aren't capable of violence against sapient beings. Kipling's Gunga Din praises the Tuull type of bravery.

So the paragraph now reads:

She looked Vivie in the eye and told her, "And you, my dear, will be the first and likely the only being to set foot on the planet Tuull that has deliberately killed another sapient being. You are going to pick a song and explain it to them and help them understand why humans believe killing might be necessary. Maybe you can contrast Saddler with Ochs and show refusal to kill can also be considered heroic by humans. Then, and I think you should be the one to recite it; we'll end with Kipling's Gunga Din. An explanation may not even be needed. It speaks to the heart of Tuull-type bravery."

 

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