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Edited Chapter 4 submitted

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Thanks to EspressoBolus for the question regarding why the second medic crew would approach a patrol car. First, what would indicate the protagonist was more injured than the wife? (nothing). Second, what would tip them off that anybody in the patrol car might need them? (nothing). I fixed it, I think, and submitted an edited chapter four.

Thank you, Mr. Bolus!

 

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