Diederik Rask: Blog

Seems that I was in a bit too much of a hurry and missed a number of errors. None of them are game-changers, thankfully.

I will be posting an addendum as I did for the first version. This one is noticeably different.

Thank you to everyone who has given me feedback and pointed out the mistakes/errors so I can make the corrections. They all help me write better and give me a boost to keep on writing.

Well, chapter four is in the queue. This is the last of the story that is taken from the original and updated. Pretty sure I'm going to have to go back and make some corrections to an earlier chapter as some of my numbers have changed. Anyway, enjoy!

DR

Chapters one and two have been resubmitted with corrections and some changes (nothing game-changing).

Chapter three is also in the queue.

I am nearly caught up to where I had ended the original version of the story. I have merged a few chapters and will continue to do so. And, once I am into entirely new material, the rate at which I produce new chapters is likely to slow down as I attempt to add more details and fill out the story so it has more life to it. No one wants to read a story that is written like a technical manual, I'm sure.

Thanks for reading my stories,

DR

I am an avid reader, and I track stories that I've read to see what others say about them. I recently read a comment about one story where the MC is transported from his world and life into a new and dangerous world, but never looks back at what he has lost. I'm guilty of doing the same and considering the age and lack of experience of my two young adults, it needs to be addressed. Otherwise, it is unbelievable even for a story like this. They should be affected by this situation in very telling ways.

I'm going to be revamping the story from chapter one. Most of this will be adding in details to give more character to the story. I've been writing a story more like I'm writing a minimalist report. I need to correct that.

When I do re-post the story, I hope all my readers will enjoy it even more than they already do.

Thanks once again to those who have sent me feedback. They've pointed out mistakes I've made, which help me to make the stories much better.

Thanks for the feedback! I hope you enjoy this next chapter.