VeryWellAged: Blog

I sent Part 2 off to my erstwhile and trusted editor, Grisbuff. He needs a few days to digest it and has other duties, far more urgent and pressing to perform. So while I await the return of my copy which I trust will likely need significant reworking, I find myself with time on my hands.

I decided to re-read and edit Jake's Thread #1 and am sure glad I did. Even though has been through innumerable edits with me and two editors, I found errors in 10 of 12 chapters! How embarrassing!

I also found some sentences that needed to be reworked. So I did that today. By now 8 of the 10 reworked chapters have worked their way through the submission process and are already posted. The last two will be posted momentarily.

Maybe tomorrow I will take on Thread #2! :-) I find a day without a writing assignment to be frustrating. I seem to need to write. Why after all these years? Weird.

The next story, is in two parts. The first part I expect to post on Sunday.

This is a new Jake Thread but written from the Point of View of the child of the mother who marries Jake. I do recommend reading some of the other Jake's Threads first.

I will post the second part next week. The second part is not a stand-alone story. The first part, if I had chosen to, could have ended without a part two... but for those of you who already know Jake... well that just would not do.

I hope you enjoy The Package Deal.

My current and trusted editor --> Grisbuff <-- and others have asked me to pursue some of the story lines from the POV of a woman. I am a old guy and while I flatter myself in that I know a little about women, I also know I feel completely insecure writing from such a POV without a female editor sitting on my shoulder. The problem comes in finding one! There are almost 300 volunteer editors listed, but there is no way to know if there is even one woman among them. And even then, a Filipino woman has a completely different world view than does an American or European woman. It is more than subtle. There are a whole set of different values. So while continuation of Thread #1 can be accomplished with the help of an American woman editor for the accuracy of the POV, and I don't know how to find her, how to get the POV for Joy, or Abbey, or Jun, or Ganda.... well I have no clue. I know how they act in the situations they are found in within my stories... and I know the behaviors are the right ones as would be found in the real world, even though the stories are fiction... but I do not know what goes on in their brains. I only know the results of those processes. Suggestions are welcome.

I submitted version 1.0 with the appendix but the website conversion did not support the code for the appendix, so I have submitted a version without the appendix.

I will review how do get the appendix so that I will display correctly.

I have completed a story I am calling "Gang Aft Agley" from the Robbie Burns poem, "To a Mouse."

I know I will get notes from those who only know the variant of the phrase from "Auld Lang Syne" but such is life... this is a snippet from the Burns' poem.

But Mousie, thou art no thy lane,
In proving foresight may be vain:
The best laid schemes o' mice an' men
Gang aft agley,
An' lea'e us nought but grief an' pain,
For promis'd joy!

Still thou are blest, compared wi' me!
The present only toucheth thee:
But och! I backward cast my e'e,
On prospects drear!
An' forward, tho' I canna see,
I guess an' fear!

And that is the basis for story... with the exception that our protagonist worries but does not fear. I hope you enjoy it when it is posted.