A reader found comma slice heaven in these two chapters and graciously fixed them for us. Also, Erik graciously pointed out other technical errors which once corrected will make these chapters flow better. I am so appreciative of this type of help.
You wouldn't believe how much better the story became because of Mr. Wolf and NancyRX. Now Erik is helping me with things like names ending in "s" like Palus. I should of used Palus's but have been using Palus'.