Daydreamz: Blog

I've just had yet another go at this story, with version 2.5. My problem with it has always been that Douglas loves Faye but he can't end up marrying her because they are so unequal. So the story degenerated from an intimate first half to my usual teen orgy nonsense in the second, and in the process it lost the feeling.

So now I've tried to keep the focus more on Faye and maintain the mood, without giving up on the basic plot. If any readers feel like commenting on this, ideally in the public Comments at the end, I'd be very grateful.

The babies thing at the end of 'If I Told Her to Take Her Clothes Off She Just Would' was a bit parachuted in, fair comment, so I've redone it. I've tried to make the rest of it a bit more believable too (an uphill task I know) by bringing out some causality, so hopefully the whole thing works a bit better now.

but I've changed the title of "I'm Soooo Bored, Uncles!" completely, to "A Niece Holiday in the Sun".

It dawned on me that the niece (/daughter/sister) Lara is the one character whose head we are never in - she is the one who is everyone else's focus - so a title that sounded like it's a first person narrative from her was a bit misleading.

I still have a faint feeling there's a better title out there somewhere though!

Apologies to readers who are part way through 'If I Told Her To Take Her Clothes Off, She Just Would'.

Now the first rush of readers is over I finally HAD to change Alistair to something else, after stupidly creating two main characters' names both starting A L I and then an S sound! Can't believe I did that. There is some ghastly instinct to get in a groove with names isn't there, if you don't pay attention. Anyway now he is Douglas.

So I finally got unstuck and found an ending for If I Told Her To Take Her Clothes Off. Like a few of my stories it just started with a graphic - I must try and find it to put on the cover. It's now my most voted story so that's pleasing, even if the 24 chapters must have helped.

What next? This is the question. I would say "no gang of teen girls" but I swore "no girlxgirl" last time and look what happened.