Yes tonight is the night its been proffed and now i'm just going back one more time to see if its all right. I have work till 10 pm. Well... part of chapter 8 is done its the next chapter that will tie this all together hopefully...
I'm still looking for some one to bounce ideas off of or an editor to tell me at least what I'm doing wrong, but David still does his wonderful proofing since dyslexia and writing (or even just spelling in my case) have never gotten along.
This new chapter has a few new elements to it and I struggled to hash out the characterization(say that ten times fast). If any of this next chapter dosn't make real sense or is lacking in some way ... please tell me.
... Also i've found the perfect picture for Jill its @ here. yep shes hot.
Okay the Next chapter might take a while, for many reasons but mainly one I'm trying to balance what powers John Solath and Jill have and will have to make it balanced, and for that im using my old psionics book from 2nd edition dnd ... but im realizing psionsist' totally kick mages butts.... so its taking a while for that. also Solath has been organizing her revenge for years against the Razory I want to do that justice in some small way instead of rushing it, so it take some cleaver word play.... with those reasons I have written parts of chapter 5,6,and 7 but none to completion or to what I want them to convey so If your reading this thank you and keep watching the next chapter will come hopefully by this weekend
now im struggling with chapter 5, I know what I want to do but im not sure how ... extreme(?) I want to make it. so ill ask is sex one of the driving reasons you the reader are reading? or is the plot engaging enough that you dont need that right now and want the story to progress more with less fluff?
Im a man of few words and people want me to write longer chapters...right now I know this isn't the best story out there like the genie chronicles by... I forgot or accidental commander by tonyG(?)or the more recent missing dragon on literotica. so im trying to take it slow and get a good multifunctional base that will give me the opportunity to do anything I really think is awesome and not burn out and stop updating.
on that note im looking for some one to critique/maybe edit my up coming chapters. I have ideas but no one to bounce them off of and see if I'm missing something... so any ways thanks for reading and as the title says next chapter is done but i need to organize my thoughts on what is comeing next... help in saying yes or no to the question above will do that.
I'm going to be pacing it out a bit more for now since the grammatical errors and stuff are making some peoples eyes bleed so anyways thanks all and I'll be posting hopefully Saturday or Sunday at the latest the newest chapter.
thanks all for the support,
yommot
I'm going on to the next chapter, but I'm a big Robbert Jordan fan and I am wondering am I being to vague and lacking in description. I'm trying to create a new world her that I've thought about for the past couple months now and I can see it can you guys(and girls)?
tough the cool home made time machine will be explained and such in a few chapters down the road.
my hope for this story is to have it like those stories where an old guy gets to have a new body and go back in time, but this time my character gets to do it on his own terms and will not be the past the he remembers reading about except in a fantasy books.
anyways this is still the beginning and the writing style can adapt as needed to give a good setting to start out on. that said this will be epic in length and will have fun twists and turns that I have planned out so stay tuned.