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Hi, Im really interested in Stupid Boy by G Younger. I've really liked some of the sports stories here on SOL, and Stupid Boy is a long story aswell which I like. My question before I start reading this is, are there any female... "betrayals", in lack of a better word (english is not my first language). The most recent sport story here I started reading (I won't name the title, because spoilers) was great until the MCs girlfriend dumped him for someone else. While alot of people like such drama, I dislike it, and I still get in a foul mood because I couldnt really force myself to continue with it even though I loved the sports parts. So before I start with Stupid Boy I wonder if there is any uptrading or cheating. Unless the girl that does it is unlikable from the start, I find that easier to deal with. I realize that this might not be a romantic soul mates fall in love at sight kind of story, and I don't mind if MC just have a bunch of casual relationships, has less hurting break ups, if he's screwing a donkey, or if he is the one doing the cheating. Before you go all moralistic on me about that, know that I do NOT think it's ok for men to cheat, it's just that when I read about that I can easily just think to myself what an asshole MC is and laugh at him when it welldeservedly bites him in the ass, whereas I can relate to cheating spouses on a personal level, and reading that can ruin my day.
Thanks for reading and sorry for any errors in the text, I'm writing on a phone and english isn't my language!

I'm in a minority but I don't like the David's "soul mate" Tami one little bit. David is a poor excuse for a boyfriend but Tami is manipulative, self centered and treats David poorly. Don't want to give any more away

Diligently searching, I think I found... four errors. One missing apostrophe, one missing space/hyphen, and English should be capitalized (two appearances).

Considering what my posts look like when I'm using a phone, you have nothing to concern yourself about.

You have a very good grasp of written English. Have you considered writing stories?

My question before I start reading this is, are there any female... "betrayals"

Short answer -- yes.

The sobstory later to "explain" the betrayal fell flat for me. I already shoved the girl into the unimportant pile at that point. There are so many girls at that point in the story and the girl wasn't in the spotlight for so long, that it didn't matter at that point anymore.

Banadin's hero is clearly morally superior to Stupid Boy. They both go to Hollywood but Banadin has John Wayne as a character. The only star in his movies set in Texas, because Texas is the Lone Star State.

are there any female... "betrayals",

Dude, it's a relatively accurate story about teenage kids. There are female betrayals, male betrayals, general teenage hormonal craziness, adult betrayals, dog betrayals, and even a fickle cat.

If you can't handle people being people, don't read this story. Go re-read DualWriter's Vacation or something.

I quit reading it because the boy is such a jerk when dealing with the other characters in the story.

I guess the simple answer to your question is yes, although others may not agree. I'm still reading the story, but I do wonder why sometimes. It's another one of those stories where everything a young high school kid touches is golden. Not realistic at all. He has the morals of an alley cat. He screws anything that moves but gets angry when his woman of the hour screws anyone else. No parent on earth would put up with his actions.