Forum: Story Discussion and Feedback

I'm not sure if this is the proper place to post this. The author does not have comments activated on the story, nor 'contact author' which is what I would normally do. This story was very enjoyable, kept my attention, and generally well written. The author seems to have a loyal following as the score is 8.0 . But .. it would have been even better if it had been better proofed .. punctuation missing, repeated paragraphs, and occasional character name misstatement. So a friendly suggestion to use an editor, or at least some softeware to help find glaring issues.

I've found having the computer read the story to you as a good way to find those errors that like to hide.

The author has a real problem keeping the character's names correct. In Valkyrie the MC is sometimes referred to as Emily.
The character names go completely off track in "Emma's Choice".
In chapter 4 ALL the characters have different first names and last names. The MC, Emma became Clara, Jimmy became Henry, Caleb Kincaid became Elias McCade, Mary became Lydia, Clara changed again to Claire, the MC's family name changed from Perkins to Hayes and so on.
The author has some good story ideas but non-existent editing spoils them.