Stop the presses! In a story being posted on SOL, the description, in full, says, "Little girls get bigger everyday."
Stop the presses! In a story being posted on SOL, the description, in full, says, "Little girls get bigger everyday."
Yeah, that author is notable for his compact descriptions, often intelligible only to existing readers.
Yeah, that author is notable for his compact descriptions
You could even describe them as nondescript ;-)
AJ
I only noticed it because of this discussion :)
I haven't read the new-postings lists for a while. Too much already pending for me to read.
It's on Chapter 80+ at this point, and you JUST noticed it?
I only noticed it because of this discussion :)
I noticed it when she first posted it, and given the scant, uninformative description, decided to avoid it. Later on, when I saw the generally positive rating, I decided to give it a try, but found the premise completely implausible (even for a confirmed science-fiction/fantasy author) and couldn't continue beyond the first chapter or two.
As always, it's important to note that the story description is literally the most important paragraphs of the entire story. Readers can only appreciate your dazzling opening line if the decide to crack open the story, and who's going to do that if the description doesn't summarize the main conflict in the story. In that case, even reading the first chapter becomes a humongous crap shoot, as the story could be about anything at all!
Curiosity now engaged, I took a look. I think it took me about four or five chapters or so to find something I could recognize as a premise. Admittedly, they were very short chapters.
The Flintkote stories are part of a larger "Time Watch" story arc and begin with Accidental Crossroads (a story in the Damsels In Distress Universe).
Other Flintkote stories are:
The Road to Chaos;
Surprise Melody Flintkote;
Surprise Melody Flintkote Part Two;
and chronological the latest: Tyche;
HM.
I presume 'Tyche' doesn't make a lot of sense unless you're read the previous stories and are familiar with the characters.
AJ
Yes.
It's even worse: The political environment is the "Princessapality" formerly a part of the USA. In all stories are references to events from other stories in the larger story arc of Wendy's Worlds.
Junior (now the ruling Princessa) interacts with Tyche in quite some chapters.
HM.
the "Princessapality"
I consider that a spelling mistake. It's obviously intended to mirror 'principality' so it should be 'Princessipality' ;-)
AJ
the "Princessapality"
I consider that a spelling mistake. It's obviously intended to mirror 'principality' so it should be 'Princessipality' ;-)
I think it's intentional, her title is "Princessa" not Princess, so she named it 'Princessapality'.
Here a quote from Junior Goes to War
"They have cast the first stone ... we shall answer with stones of our own making. Let this next demonstration be as a warning to others who would invade my Princessapality."
HM.
I think it's intentional, her title is "Princessa" not Princess
The author's verdict is final!
AJ
Curiosity now engaged, I took a look. I think it took me about four or five chapters or so to find something I could recognize as a premise. Admittedly, they were very short chapters.
Actually, I went back and took a look and I was mistaking it for another time traveling lady tale (with a slightly longer description). The one being discussed I never even bothered opening.
"Little girls get bigger everyday."
Should that be "every day" (2 words)? That always stumps me when it's one word and when it's two. I would have wrote that two words.
Should that be "every day" (2 words)?
correct. As two words every day is s descriptive type of day, while as one word it's an adjective describing the the noun about to follow: like an everyday event.