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D. Fritz ๐Ÿšซ

I have been posting stories here for about two months and have received contradictory feedback from readers. For example, some have said they don't like stories with a lot of sex (which I find amusing since the login page clearly says, "Storiesonline: Free Sex Stories"), while others are only looking for stories with high sexual content, and seem to down vote anything that does not match their expectation.

What is your impression on the percentage of readers that are looking for ...

* a non-sex story?
* a story where sex is included but is story driven?
* a story where sex is all that matters?

Likewise, what about the publishing timeline? I posted one story a chapter at a time and received negative feedback that it "does a disservice to the reader." However, when posting a multi-chapter story in one shot it seems to disappear too quickly and doesn't have enough exposure to gain any degree of readership.

I just posted my eighth story. I have tried to write a wide variety of different stories - lots of sex, no sex, a bit longer, a couple very short stories - and there doesn't seem to be any patterns. Hence, my post here. :)

Thanks for any insights!

Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@D. Fritz

I simply say to write what you enjoy writing. You are the storyteller, it is your story.

Do not worry about what others think. Some will always want more/less of something. But unless they are offering to pay you money to write stories how they want, I say feel free to ignore them.

Eddie Davidson ๐Ÿšซ
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@D. Fritz

You have hit it on the head.

"Stories online - sex stories" and yet there are so many people who are clearly uninterested in naughty stories.

Not only in reading but also writing them.

I think the demographics also drastically change during summer and christmas breaks when school is out. The authors seem to write stories that are far less plausible and grade school level during those periods. I could be wrong about that assesment but I am guessing that the influx of poor quality writing is directly related to those time periods.

I don't want to denigrate anyone else's work because they could the same about my story quality. However, the premise of those stories is often so juvenile that I think the author has no idea how a female body actually works.

Unfortunately, there is no easy melting pot or quorum to be had on the internet. If I write a story that pleases one, it pisses off another. I've had people offer to proof read for me and then because I touch upon a fetish that squicks them bail on me.

I also get regular downvoters who are obviously just trying to send me a message to 'stop writing' - the message goes unheard.

I was chugging along with a 30 part story that I absolutely adored. I got some negative feedback that essentially killed my interest in continuing the story - so I admit that I am sensitive to that sort of thing. It just hasn't broken me to the point where I will stop writing permanently.

My advice is the same as others in this thread: TRY not to let it bother you. If it does - take a break and renew your interests. Don't try to figure out what makes the readers on this site tick. It will only end in frustration.

Keet ๐Ÿšซ

@Eddie Davidson

I think the demographics also drastically change during summer and christmas breaks when school is out.

I think the demographics have changed over the last decade or so. The hard core 'sex-story' readers are often ASSTR imports while others here simply want a variety of good stories, not necessarily with lots of sex.

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Eddie Davidson ๐Ÿšซ

@Keet

I have not found an alternative to this site that is sex story specific and as user friendly to the author to post serial stories.

The others just lack in so many ways - there is really no other home for my stories.

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D. Fritz ๐Ÿšซ

@Eddie Davidson

Thanks for all of the replies!

I like the idea of using separate pseudonyms to group stories differently. Is it possible to move a published story from one pseudonym to another?

And, yeah, after one or two stories I quickly realized I needed to write what I wanted / liked, because someone would always be offended. I had one early reader respond with an email entitled, "Are You Stupid?" He disagreed with a plot point and spent a few paragraphs telling me how dumb it was that a character took a particular action. Obviously, I disagreed as I wrote it and thought the action was inline, and consistent, with the character's beliefs and motives throughout the story.

Story #8 was just published and I don't have anything else close to being done so it will give me a little time off to think up my next storyline!

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Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@D. Fritz

I had one early reader respond with an email entitled, "Are You Stupid?" He disagreed with a plot point and spent a few paragraphs telling me how dumb it was that a character took a particular action. Obviously, I disagreed as I wrote it and thought the action was inline, and consistent, with the character's beliefs and motives throughout the story.

I still get that on occasion. Mostly I simply politely respond, explain why I had something happen, then moved on. Most of my comments about my writing is actually right in the open for all to see. And I almost never filter it, about the only time I delete something is if it is future plot related.

Heck, I recently got the recent as a "review", and I leave it up still for all to see.

I genueinly like your storytelling, well written, certainly. But it does get very repetitive and seems to go nowhere.

9/10 for the prose, the writing craft, 4/10 for getting a storyline on track.

Well, yea. And as most who have read my comments know it is very much an "experimental story". Heck, the main character did not even put his penis into the girl he met in Chapter 1 until Chapter 26. It is rambling, it tends to bounce around a bit, I took an insane amount of time until I finally let him hook up with the "love of his life".

Uhhh, on purpose. Jokingly, I have been calling it the "Seinfeld of Porn". It goes off on tangents, you may get chapters about things that other than details repeat over and over again. But guess what? That's life. But if somebody looks for details, things do change, and those passages are showing the changes over time.

But I got lots of other stories that are more to the point. So if somebody does not like my scribblings in one, they are welcome to find another they like more.

And I laugh at "getting the storyline on track", it amuses me because part of the story was simply allowing me to see how long I could drag things out. Yet at the same time have things progress, and not simply stagnate.

We all know those. Guy meets girl, guy fucks girl, 100 chapters later guy is still fucking girl. Ad nauseum. I simply got it in my head to try something new. Even including the **GASP** main character have at least 3 hot girls hit on him and state they wanted to sleep with him, which he turned down but then had varying levels of sexual tension with afterwards.

But ultimately, we are the authors and creators of the worlds we make. I welcome input, and am pleased others enjoy what I post here. But ultimately, I am writing for my own enjoyment and sanity.

Crumbly Writer ๐Ÿšซ

@D. Fritz

Obviously, I disagreed as I wrote it and thought the action was inline, and consistent, with the character's beliefs and motives throughout the story.

My editors tell me the same things at times. What you think is fitting for a character may just not strike readers the right way, depending on their backgrounds and experiences.

I've noted before, many readers absolutely despise strong female characters, but those with sisters or little girls who dream of big things and making changes in the world adore them, while their counterparts see them as 'utterly unrealistic' and claim that 'no woman ever thinks that way!

But that's what makes Beta-Readers so valuable, as they can often spot those character discrepancies before you do, so you can account for and acknowledge them, buying you time to fully expand the characters to reveal their complete personalities.

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Not_a_ID ๐Ÿšซ

@Crumbly Writer

I've noted before, many readers absolutely despise strong female characters, but those with sisters or little girls who dream of big things and making changes in the world adore them, while their counterparts see them as 'utterly unrealistic' and claim that 'no woman ever thinks that way!

This one deserves a footnote. I've seen a number of Hollywood "Strong Female characters" that I do despise. But it isn't because they're "strong women" it's often because of how they're being written. Or more particularly, how their supporting characters are written.

The ones that "play it straight" (not in a sexual preference context) are generally great.

Its the ones that play up feminist politics that get the hate piled on them.

Strong female character? Sure.
Strong female character who only ever encounters men who are one of: extremely deferential to them(borderline servile), incompetent, highly bigoted, or the villain?
Expect to get lambasted.

It certainly reflects the experience of many women, but mostly just the feminists. Where I'm not going to fully challenge the validity of that experience. Except we do need to point out that what someone thinks they experienced, and what actually happened can be very different things.

But accurate or not, it isn't something I'm inclined to want to watch or otherwise encounter.

Much like I don't care to watch recent productions set in present day (or the future) where any woman who appears is portrayed as being extremely deferential to men(borderline servile), or incompetent. (Well, possibly except for certain types of porn, but that's a pretty narrow field)

Any kind of story where members of (insert group here) is only allowed to be a normal person and competent is when they're the antagonist for the MC is bad writing.

Crumbly Writer ๐Ÿšซ

@Eddie Davidson

"Stories online - sex stories" and yet there are so many people who are clearly uninterested in naughty stories.

Not only in reading but also writing them.

Coming in late once again, the important thing to remember is the historical context. SOL started out as a sex-story site, and sex stories are what brings new readers in the door, thus the notice on the door makes sense. But over time, readers get tired of the constant 'I saw XXX in the shower and couldn't stop myself', at which point they start looking for better (longer, more subtle stories, at least) to take up more of their time.

It's not a value judgement between the two, it's an alternative. So, generally, those who've been visiting the site for a while focus on the more expansive stories that focus on an actual plot line, while those who haven't been her very long (i.e. only a few years, as opposed to a few decades) are mostly looking for the next saga to sink their teeth in).

But it doesn't take much to differentiate the two, and while there aren't a great number of serious literary pieces, they help balance things, keeping readers satisfied as they grow as readers. The short, quick sex stories and the site's bread and butter, but the serious stories are the site's filet mignon, a real treat to sink your teeth into and savor.

The regulars will chew go through a hell of a lot of cheap burgers, but they generally don't want it every day. So, yeah, expect a lot of 'what is this carp' or 'this doesn't belong on a sex stories site' comments, but take them with a grain of salt, as it's obvious those readers haven't been here very long, and don't yet grasp how the site functions.

The sex romps bring the boys to the yard, the longer-paced, more detailed stories keep them coming back.

P.S. I've long ago got tired of sex scenes in my stories, because even though they're always the highest rated of my chapters, someone is always offended. Either someone's just had sex, has just broken up or just isn't in the mood, and they'll curse you up and down for even referencing sex, while those who are looking for something to 'put them in the mood' will berate you for NOT giving them something to beat themselves into submission with. Don't waste time picking one over the other, just write what drives you to write. The emotions you bring to the story is what wins most readers over, not the content.

CANDAULISTS ๐Ÿšซ

@Eddie Davidson

Posting a story while it is a work in progress come with the risk that reader comments might sway the author's direction. Readers don't have the full vision that a writer is communicating until the whole story is told.

If a writer needs reader feedback to build the story, more power to them. I only post completed stories.

Pixy ๐Ÿšซ

As Mushy says, do your own thing, some will like it, some will hate it. There doesn't seem to be any particular logic to voting. I have a story at Scifi stories (a sister site to this one) which is sitting at eight and the same story here, where it's siting at 7.2.

I would actually suggest creating another pseudonym(s) and splitting your stories between them. If you are going to write about a varied range of subjects, I would split the pieces between pseudonyms with each pseudonym dealing with a particular kink (say, one for no sex, one for incest, one for same sex relationships, one for violence, one for bestiality etc etc.) Part of the problem is that readers have hates and if they see something that offends them, then they will vote it down by habit regardless of whether or not they actually read it.

If a high score is all you are after, then write a story about a US army veteran who sleeps with his daughter. I have noticed over the years, that stories involving daddy daughter incest and those involving US military, score higher than average regardless of whether or not the story deserves it or not.

Conversely, I have also noticed any story that puts the US army in a 'bad light' will also attract the wrath of One Bomber Command...

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Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@Pixy

Conversely, I have also noticed any story that puts the US army in a 'bad light' will also attract the wrath of One Bomber Command...

And most of them I would simply laugh at and ignore.

I make no secret I am career Military. But at the same time, I also recognize that there are "bad eggs" in every group.

About the only time I ever get upset is when somebody is simply outright wrong and tries to portray the military itself and its members as "evil". The military only teaches people to kill, the military is full of nothing but idiots and criminals, rape is taught and endorsed, things like that. If somebody wants to make a story about a rogue group that goes on missions and decides it is their duty to go around and impregnate young girls, they can knock their socks off as far as I am concerned.

Just so long as they openly state that the missions are unsanctioned, and they are doing all they can to hide it because they know the military would be all over them like stink on shit.

Now if they try to state in the military it is official policy to do that, well then yea I would have major issues. Unless it is say "future history" in some kind of dystopia in 50 years.

Mostly, my issues here in those classified as "military" (which I actually almost never read) is because they are factually moronic. Most involve the kid with the IQ of a turnip who becomes a Seal-Green Beret-Sniper who accumulates 300 kills, and can bed anybody he wants just be being the studly man he is. Either that, or the author does not hide they hate the military, and is doing all they can to make all in it look bad.

Of course, I also almost never watch "war movies" either. Same thing, I find most of them moronic and retarded in the extreme.

Crumbly Writer ๐Ÿšซ

@Pixy

As Mushy says, do your own thing, some will like it, some will hate it. There doesn't seem to be any particular logic to voting. I have a story at Scifi stories (a sister site to this one) which is sitting at eight and the same story here, where it's siting at 7.2.

That's another Major point, if you're getting abused a little too often, then consider posting stories to FineStories (a 'child friendly' site: even if it's directed towards older children and adults, you'll generally find a more supportive and appreciative audience there, just as you've find one for any science-fiction/fantasy stories on the ScifiStories site).

Often, to help support the alternative sites, I'll post many of my stories to those sites first, so readers who'll appreciate them can give me their honest opinions, before the haters on SOL dump all over my creations. (Though SOL readers are supportive, there are just so many with absolutely fixed opinions, it's harder to get good, honest opinions before the final chapter posts.)

Pixy ๐Ÿšซ

I know if you start another pseudonym, Lazeez or one of the admins will move it across if you ask them. From reading posts on the forums, it appears Laz tends to be very helpful in that regard.

You could also simply delete the story and re-post it under the new pseudonym. If you think you have been one bombed unfairly, I would recommend that you delete the story and re-post it under the 'new' author as that would help protect you from readers with an inflated sense of morale high ground.

For instance, if you create the pen name "Peter Poo Pants" and only post scat related stories there, then you have less chance of a non-scat interested reader stumbling across it, being morally outraged at their squick being triggered and down-voting accordingly. Also, now that you have attracted a reader who is interested in that particular fetish, they are more likely to read your other work by that pen-name if that is also scat related.

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Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@Pixy

For instance, if you create the pen name "Peter Poo Pants" and only post scat related stories there, then you have less chance of a non-scat interested reader stumbling across it, being morally outraged at their squick being triggered and down-voting accordingly.

*LAUGHING*

I think one thing that always annoys me is those that get all offended and outraged, when the codes are already listed. Or offended because they are not finding what they want in my stories, even though the codes they want are not in my story.

"I WANT MORE INCEST!"
"Why are you telling me? This story has no incest code, go find one that does."

"I WANT THE CHARACTER TO GET EVERYBODY PREGNANT!"
"Uhh, the main character is 16. That would turn it from a fun fantasy into a horror."

"I WANT TO SEE SUCH-AND-SUCH POLITICIAN HUMILIATED!"
"Uhhh, this is not a political story, I don't do that."

"I WANT..."
"Tell you what, then. Stop complaining to me, and write your own damn story with all of that you want in it."

"BUT I CAN'T WRITE! CATER TO ME!"
"*Considers the legality of defenestration.*"

In short, do not worry about those that only complain. Most are not writers, would never be writers, and are lazy and selfish SOBs that only think they should get whatever they want.

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Pixy ๐Ÿšซ
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@Mushroom

I have to admit, that sometimes I write purely because I am curious as to whether or not I can, in relation to certain subjects. I posted a story not too long ago where the premise was to take as many 'offensive' story codes as possible and put them in as cohesive story as possible. Which given the story tags involved was quite a challenge...LOL. Hell, I even said what I was doing in the story descriptor and sat back for the fireworks. I wasn't disappointed. LOL. But I had a blast doing it and the scoring was hilarious, talk about polar extremes, it was about as Marmite as you could get without actually being Marmite. Plenty of votes either end and nothing in 'the middle'.

I agree with you Mushroom. I don't tend to watch or read much military stuff. I also had the pleasure of working alongside many forces, along with their associated branches (Navy, Land, and Air and SF ) and the difference between them all and their branches was astoundingly polar.

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Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@Pixy

I have to admit, that sometimes I write purely because I am curious as to whether or not I can, in relation to certain subjects. I posted a story not too long ago where the premise was to take as many 'offensive' story codes as possible and put them in as cohesive story as possible.

And I have done the exact same thing. I wrote on purpose an absolutely horrible story. Including in it every code I could, writing in a juvenile manner, and warning everybody in the description exactly what I was doing.

I was sitting at work and died.

Then I woke up and realized I was a teenager again, and I was a woman! I was not just any woman, I was my own 16 year old twin sister! Wow, I always wanted to fuck my twin sister, so now I can fuck myself as my brother!

So I went into the hall, and realized I was not reliving my life, I was in heaven! And stretching before me was a hallway of endless doors.

I went into the first one, and saw my mother fucking my father. Or was he fucking her? Either way, they were fucking. I watched and jacked off on the doorway, then went to the next door.

Yea, absolutely nothing like anything I had ever posted before. Yet I still laughed when I got some hate mail, saying that I did not include enough of their kink to keep their interest.

Obviously they missed the joke. The narrator finally realizes they are not in Stories Online Heaven, they are actually in Stories Online Hell. Part of the strange sense of humor that caused me to "Rick-Roll" my readers at another time.

bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Pixy

I posted a story not too long ago where the premise was to take as many 'offensive' story codes as possible and put them in as cohesive story as possible.

That would be easy enough... turn 'The Aristocrats' into a flash story, and end with the punchline being delivered unexpectedly.

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Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@bk69

That would be easy enough... turn 'The Aristocrats' into a flash story, and end with the punchline being delivered unexpectedly.

I have actually done something similar, but not as Flash.

Hot sex, middle aged guy banging the hell of out of a hot young chick. Only at the very end to realize he might now have HIV. Or a chick letting a guy who she thought was her husband bang her on a rooftop over looking the city as they were preparing to get her pregnant, only to realize that had not been her husband.

Or as a challenge here once, thinking he was only banging his sister's occasional lover, only to realize...

Part of the fun I think of making a good story is to work to get your readers thinking they know where you are going. Then at the very end to pull out the tablecloth, and reveal you were going somewhere else all along.

Just like the classic "Aristocrats" joke. And yes, I am very familiar with the concept. For those that are not, it is an old and very off-color joke. Generally a booking agent at a theater talking to a talent scout who hopes they will book their act.

The agent will describe a "Family Act", that includes things like scat, incest, beastiality, pedophilia, and anything else that falls into the area of the most sick humor the comic can think of. And the punch line, is that they call themselves "The Aristocrats". Being the exact opposite of what the act actually does on stage.

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awnlee jawking ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

Part of the fun I think of making a good story is to work to get your readers thinking they know where you are going. Then at the very end to pull out the tablecloth, and reveal you were going somewhere else all along.

Deus ex machina.

You might enjoy writing them, but I bet readers are less appreciative.

AJ

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Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

Then at the very end to pull out the tablecloth, and reveal you were going somewhere else all along.

Deus ex machina.

You might enjoy writing them, but I bet readers are less appreciative.

Not if done well. The movie "The Sixth Sense" for example.

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awnlee jawking ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

The movie "The Sixth Sense" for example.

I agree with those writing experts who say that a good twist should leave the reader thinking, "I didn't see that coming but I should have."

'The Sixth Sense' matches that criterion IMO - it's not exactly a complete bolt from the blue.

On the other hand, a David Baldacci protagonist being saved at the last moment by someone the reader didn't even know existed is IMO poor/lazy writing.

AJ

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Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

a good twist should leave the reader thinking, "I didn't see that coming but I should have."

Did you know that every scene with a dead person had red in it? So much so that the people making the movie thought someone would surely notice.

I guess that meant every scene with Bruce Willis had red in it.

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bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

I guess that meant every scene with Bruce Willis had red in it.

And Bruce Willis' wardrobe was limited to the single collection of clothes he wore the night he was killed.

awnlee jawking ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

Did you know that every scene with a dead person had red in it?

No, I didn't.

To me, it's a good film but not one I'd want to see more than once. I wonder whether including such covert symbolism was M Night Shyamalan's way of trying to attract multiple viewings.

AJ

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Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ
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@awnlee jawking

To me, it's a good film but not one I'd want to see more than once. I wonder whether including such covert symbolism was M Night Shyamalan's way of trying to attract multiple viewings.

When he is good, he lays out a very meticulous world, that follows very specific rules. The Sixth Sense worked, because not only did it state very clearly early on what those rules were, but in a way nobody could miss.

Yet, everybody missed them.

Cole Sear : I see dead people.
Malcolm Crowe : In your dreams?
[Cole shakes his head no]
Malcolm Crowe : While you're awake?
[Cole nods]
Malcolm Crowe : Dead people like, in graves? In coffins?
Cole Sear : Walking around like regular people. They don't see each other. They only see what they want to see. They don't know they're dead.
Malcolm Crowe : How often do you see them?
Cole Sear : All the time. They're everywhere.

The multiple viewings are mostly to appreciate the art he used of literally putting everything in your face, yet missing it. Like that the only person Bruce Willis ever interacts with is the boy. Others appear to, but in reality do not.

Something he did not really do again well until Unbreakable. Most who watched it could see the entire thing, and not even realize they were literally watching a Superhero Origin movie.

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Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

the only person Bruce Willis ever interacts with is the boy. Others appear to, but in reality do not.

Like when he's sitting across the table from his wife at a restaurant. She never answers him. And when he reaches for the check she snatches it first.

Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

Not if done well. The movie "The Sixth Sense" for example.

M. Night is kind of hit or miss. Had an excellent movie, then an OK movie, another excellent movie, then a slew of forgettable movies.

Then found his stride again when he threw in his twist at the very end that it was a sequel to an earlier movie.

Myself, my earliest inspiration came before he was known by using O. Henry as an example. The Gift of the Magi, The Cop and the Anthem, The Caballero's Way, and similar stories. But the key is that they story is good, that is where M. Night lost it. He got to concentrating so much on the twist that the stories sucked.

bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

Deus ex machina.

No. That's more a case of writing the story into some inescapable corner, and then aliens arrive and wipe out almost everyone on earth except for the protagonist and those he cares about. Or some magical item is found that fixes everything. Or the MC wakes up from a really fucked up dream (unless the implication is that the MC is a precog, and now knows what not to do).

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awnlee jawking ๐Ÿšซ

@bk69

a plot device whereby a seemingly unsolvable problem in a story is suddenly and abruptly resolved by an unexpected and unlikely occurrence. Its function can be to resolve an otherwise irresolvable plot situation, to surprise the audience, to bring the tale to a happy ending, or act as a comedic device.

Wikipedia (spit!) indicates a broader usage, which includes the concept of a plot twist that is impossible for the reader to see coming.

AJ

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Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

Wikipedia (spit!) indicates a broader usage, which includes the concept of a plot twist that is impossible for the reader to see coming.

Only when nothing was ever given to indicate it is coming. Like say as the hero was about to be shot a truck driven by somebody never seen before runs down the shooter.

If done right, hints and clues were dropped. But it is all up to the reader to pick them up or not.

For example, in mine I gave a great many hints and clues. Describing an illustration that looks like a spikey beachball with spikes on it, in a folder called ART. And the fact that the ex-boyfriend who tried to cyberstalk the girl will never be a problem again.

https://www.avert.org/sites/default/files/styles/article_scale_style_780/public/RS16_iStock-640012070-lpr.jpg

Well, the "spikey beachball" is what the HIV virus looks like. ART is Anti-Retroviral Treatment. And yea, the ex blew his head off when the treatments stopped and he developed AIDS. I pretty much laid all of that out very early on, but it would be up to the reader to put most of that together.

But others were simply decisions. Like the main character refusing to leave with a hot girl, because he had fallen in love with a sexbot.

But then I made one with 2 twists. First, the sexy neighbor the main character gets caught having sex with is 16. OK, goes to the expected trial. But when the attorney tries to get the girl to testify, the character changes their plea to guilty, refusing to put the girl through any more trauma. Then willingly goes to jail to protect her.

Twists can come in many different ways. Twilight Zone was full of them. And the best dropped it right in your lap at the very start.

"To Serve Man".

Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

For example, in mine I gave a great many hints and clues.

I once counted the number of clues in my story "Forced Lust" after many people told me they never saw it coming. It's too long ago to remember now, but there were probably a dozen clues. You don't see them reading it the first time, but you do the second time.

Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

looks like a spikey beachball with spikes on it

From the Department of Redundancy Department?

Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

"To Serve Man".

It's a cookbook!

Not_a_ID ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

Wikipedia (spit!) indicates a broader usage, which includes the concept of a plot twist that is impossible for the reader to see coming.

"Deus ex machina" came from the romans borrowing "apรฒ mฤ“khanรชs theรณs" from the Ancient Greeks. It is basically rendered as "god from the machine"

It came from the practice of having a "god descend" onto stage through the use of a crane(well, their approximation of one) which gives it the "machine" reference.

So you have your story/play heading off in one direction, then wham, down comes the deity from above, and boom, we're in the dramatic conclusion stage because you know once the gods are personally involved, things are about to get crazy.

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Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Not_a_ID

It came from the practice of having a "god descend" onto stage through the use of a crane(well, their approximation of one) which gives it the "machine" reference.

Also, from below the stage on a platform raised by a simple, but lengthy lever.

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Not_a_ID ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

Also, from below the stage on a platform raised by a simple, but lengthy lever.

In either case, a "god" is brought onto the stage by way of a machine.

Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

You might enjoy writing them, but I bet readers are less appreciative.

Then you would bet wrong. I get a huge number of complements about how the ending surprised them.

Crumbly Writer ๐Ÿšซ

@Pixy

SF

I wouldn't worry about that one, we'll see if it's even a 'governmental organization' in another year. I'm guessing it won't be, as space has LONG been considered non-national (i.e. everyone is free to explore all they want as there are NO national boundaries, as the entire basis of SF was to 'drop bombs' (i.e. shooting down other nations' military satellites) from space!

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Not_a_ID ๐Ÿšซ

@Crumbly Writer

I wouldn't worry about that one, we'll see if it's even a 'governmental organization' in another year. I'm guessing it won't be, as space has LONG been considered non-national (i.e. everyone is free to explore all they want as there are NO national boundaries, as the entire basis of SF was to 'drop bombs' (i.e. shooting down other nations' military satellites) from space!

The Outer Space Treaty at present only prevents weapons from being deployed/based in space. It says nothing about using earth-based weapons on things in space.

And you're completely ignoring the matter that Space Force has a major focus on devising ways to protect American and allied satellites in orbit.

China and Russia have already demonstrated physical kill capabilities, and there also is the cyber-side of the equation to manage as well.

The reason for Space Force to exist is every bit as valid as the reasons for the Army Air Corps to become the United States Air Force in the 1940's.

Their missions are different and the organizational structure of the Air Force was not conducive towards giving Space the proper attention it deserves. Because the Outer Space Treaty prevents them from operating bombers and fighters in LEO.

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Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@Not_a_ID

The reason for Space Force to exist is every bit as valid as the reasons for the Army Air Corps to become the United States Air Force in the 1940's.

Heck, the Russians have had this since the 1990's. And the Soviets since the 1970's. Most of the wags do not really know what it is, or what it does. They simply wag their tongues for political reasons.

Plus the USSF needed to be a more open organization, as it is expected to cooperate with the Army, Navy, and NASA as well as other government agencies. Something the Air Force often has problems with.

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Not_a_ID ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

Plus the USSF needed to be a more open organization, as it is expected to cooperate with the Army, Navy, and NASA as well as other government agencies. Something the Air Force often has problems with.

Well, inter-service rivalry is certainly one reason I liked the formation of the Space Force. The Air Force was knocked down a couple of pegs with that change. They can't market Space Command to get C-130 ground crew.

They also are no longer to lord over the other branches about GPS and most Satellite communications. Yes, the Navy's SPAWAR had some stuff in orbit that Space Force "Acquired" as well to my understanding. But it's more palatable to deal with a service branch (Space Force) whose mission (at present) is to make sure you get the technical services you need.

Rather than dealing with the United States Air Force who still thinks carrier aviation assets should be under their control... And replaced with land-based alternatives.

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Remus2 ๐Ÿšซ

@Not_a_ID

If the human race ever gets off this rock in a permanent manner, there will be a military element to it. The intermural fight for control among US armed forces has cost the US reams of money, time, and advancements.

Space is the ultimate high ground. The military needs to work together rather than against each other.

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Not_a_ID ๐Ÿšซ
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@Remus2

Space is the ultimate high ground. The military needs to work together rather than against each other.

Oh the sausage fest that is possibly going to be, should it happen. A lot of it is likely going to depend on the timing and time scales in which certain things comes to pass. Here is one possible scenario:

The Marine Corps could possibly find its way into LEO and beyond as an augment to the Space Force very easily I think. If Space Force wants to provide the Marines with a ride, the Marines will happily take it, and the Space Force doesn't need to worry about the Marines trying to take over "Space Force turf" as there is already a long standing precedent for this with Marines already where the Navy is concerned. It also means the Space Force can let somebody else worry about most of the "Infantry stuff."

As space becomes increasingly militarized and things move beyond the earth-moon system, the Space Force gets hit by two things at possibly near the same time. The Earth-side Navy decommissioning a number of ships/transferring others to the Coast Guard... But Space Force is also coming under heavy pressure to accept lateral transfers from the downsizing Navy into the expanding Space Force.

Which happens to place a large number of former Navy types in the Space Force just as they're starting to build actual spaceships for operations beyond the earth/moon system.

Which sets the stage for the people involved in the operation of those Ships to push for their organization to operate as it own service branch independent from the Space Force -- resulting in the Space Navy.

As part of the resulting reshuffling from creating the Space Navy as its own service branch. The Space Force and Air Force are (eventually) merged back together once more as the "Orbital Guard." End result, the Marine Corps, Army, "Orbital Guard," Space Navy, and Coast Guard are the surviving entities.

Although maybe Space Force would keep its name, and might manage to get one up on the Space Navy that the Air Force never managed with the actual Navy. In that most of the space craft operated from the ships belong to the Space Force, not the Space Navy. But organizationally, I'd think that might be easier said than done for them. Their "role" in the new paradigm would be operating craft inside gravity wells, and more importantly, inside atmospheres. If a craft isn't primarily atmospheric in nature, Space Navy can claim it free and clear. But both branches may need to share in some cases, much like the Navy and Air Force do today.

Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@Not_a_ID

They also are no longer to lord over the other branches about GPS and most Satellite communications. Yes, the Navy's SPAWAR had some stuff in orbit that Space Force "Acquired" as well to my understanding. But it's more palatable to deal with a service branch (Space Force) whose mission (at present) is to make sure you get the technical services you need.

But it goes even deeper. As they have other tasks.

One of the largest is that they become the "Central Command" for cyber warfare. At this time, each branch has it's own organization, answering only to their own chain of command. As the organization in charge of this among the DoD, they become the organization that will help coordinate the efforts of each branch so they are not duplicating themselves.

It also is the organization in charge of launching things into space. The Air Force and Navy (as well as NASA) each still have their own space launch capabilities. With one organization to help coordinate that, less conflict and overlap of operations.

On the war front (which is a small part), you then have oversight into the various ABM operations of all 3 main branches. All 3 branches do have their own capabilities in this. NORAD was the Air Force organization in charge of detecting an attack against the US, then responding to it offensively. With once again all 3 major branches having their own nuclear response capabilities.

SF is similarly taking charge of the various ABM operations. So that if an attack is launched, you do not have the Army, Navy, and Air Force all "doing their own thing" and not working together as a team. Such as say all branches only concentrating on protecting their own assets, meanwhile letting other places go up in a mushroom cloud.

Or all 3 concentrating on defending only one point, when in actuality they could let one branch do that, and the other 2 defend other locations.

Having been involved for years in ABM operations myself, I see this as very important. It got tricky even on a theater wide basis, which is why such operations are normally a weird chimera of Army and Air Force both in charge. With us largely treating the Navy as a "Free Agent". Who might get involved, and then again might not.

But yes, the conflicts between the Navy and Air Force are legendary. The AF never liked that they have been allowed to have their own air programs, completely removed from what they saw as "their" area of specialization. These have been even more bitter than that between the Army and Marines.

And one the Marines take advantage of, as they can thumb their nose at the AF, and say "Don't like it, tough. We are part of the Navy."

The Air Force is still bitter because almost 30 years ago, their "Joint Advanced Strike Technology" (JAST) program became secondary, and was forced to fall under a Navy "Common Affordable Lightweight Fighter" (CALF) program, and the "Joint Strike Fighter" (JSF) was born. They wanted a replacement for the F-16, and wanted a "Super F-16". But the Navy/Marines could not use the F-16, so their toy was taken away and became something that was more specialized for those 2 branches.

Then you have the issue of the A-10. Another program the AF has wanted to kill for decades. But if they ever do, the Army has said they would consider creating the "Army Air Corps II", as the AF is mandated to provide a fixed wing dedicated close air support aircraft to the Army. And if they ever refuse, the Army can resume their fixed wing ground attack operations again.

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JoeBobMack ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

My understanding is that drones are causing disruption in the services also. AF requires full pilots, which means AF officers. Army trains drone operators, which are enlisted personnel. Exacerbates the difference in the two services as to who does the fighting. AF- officers. Army - enlisted. Again, not personal experience, so feel free to let me know. Just based on hanging around armed forces personnel for a while (but mostly Army, especially later in my career).

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Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ
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@JoeBobMack

My understanding is that drones are causing disruption in the services also. AF requires full pilots, which means AF officers. Army trains drone operators, which are enlisted personnel. Exacerbates the difference in the two services as to who does the fighting. AF- officers. Army - enlisted.

Both branches use "Enlisted Pilots". However, one things that both have in common is that only an Officer can authorize and launch weapons from the drones.

This is where the differences are seen. Since the Vietnam War when the Army bumped up their Warrant Officer program, that means they have more who are authorized to take that role. A strange position to most branches, they are both officers, and not officers.

The Army is able to put a Warrant Officer into that authorization position, where as the Air Force only uses full officers.

I always found it curious that of all 4 branches, only the 2 ground branches (Army and Marines) ever really utilized the potential of "Warrant Officers". The Navy I can kind of get, but still think they should use them in the more non-combat positions (Corpsmen, Clergy). But the Air Force not using them always puzzled me. As the very position calls for a "Subject Matter Expert", it always seems to me that this would almost scream for such a rank.

Then again, it would not surprise me if there was a cadre of Academy Graduates behind the scenes not wanting this, to ensure their positions.

But in the end, one thing has to be realized. No matter what branch, each requires an Officer (or Warrant Officer) to authorize the pushing of the button to release a weapon. Any monkey can pilot the drone, aim the PATRIOT missile, or turn the canon to the right direction. But only an officer can authorize it's use other than in self-defense (or in cases where the authority is passed to an NCO).

As I already mentioned, I worked with ABM systems for over 5 years. And while there were 2 people (normally low ranking enlisted) that ran the operations in the "Command Van" that actually launched the missiles, it was always a Commissioned Officer or Warrant Officer that actually gave the command and flipped a switch to authorize it. 3 people, but only 1 of the 3 actually given the authority to give that order.

Compared to the other branches, the Air Force is "full of officers". While as the Marines have 1 officer to each 8 enlisted and the Army and Navy have 1 officer to each 5 enlisted, the Air Force has 1 officer to each 4 enlisted.

This is why you see many more positions that other branches give to senior NCOs and Warrant Officers given to Officers in the AF. They simply have "excess that need jobs". In a branch where if you are not flying in some way, you are largely ignored.

Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@Crumbly Writer

entire basis of SF was to 'drop bombs'

Was never the purpose. I always laugh when people say things like this.

Pixy ๐Ÿšซ

@Crumbly Writer

I wouldn't worry about that one, we'll see if it's even a 'governmental organization' in another year. I'm guessing it won't be, as space has LONG been considered non-national (i.e. everyone is free to explore all they want as there are NO national boundaries, as the entire basis of SF was to 'drop bombs' (i.e. shooting down other nations' military satellites) from space!

This reply (and the other ones in reply to the reply) confuzzled me greatly... And then it finally dawned on me (in it's own sweet time) that there had been a misunderstanding. When I said SF, it was in the terms of 'Special Forces' NOT Space Farce (sic). I have never worked with a Space Force (Met plenty of Space Cadets....) I have met Buzz Aldrin though, and what a thoroughly nice bloke he was to, he even said he would send me a signed photograph, which I rather skeptically disbelieved in typical Blighty fashion, right up until a large envelope popped through the letterbox a few weeks later- all the way from America, stamped all over with NASA's logo.... LOL. Inside was his photo signed by him to me by name. It was a valuable life lesson, not all famous people are twats.

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Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Pixy

It was a valuable life lesson, not all famous people are twats.

And conversely, not all twats are famous people.

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bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

And conversely, not all twats are famous people.

Some twats, tho, are part of famous people.

Not_a_ID ๐Ÿšซ

@Pixy

I wouldn't worry about that one, we'll see if it's even a 'governmental organization' in another year. I'm guessing it won't be, as space has LONG been considered non-national (i.e. everyone is free to explore all they want as there are NO national boundaries, as the entire basis of SF was to 'drop bombs' (i.e. shooting down other nations' military satellites) from space!


This reply (and the other ones in reply to the reply) confuzzled me greatly... And then it finally dawned on me (in it's own sweet time) that there had been a misunderstanding. When I said SF, it was in the terms of 'Special Forces' NOT Space Farce (sic)

I doubt "Special Forces" is likely to ever become it's own service branch. While they might like their JSOC(Joint Special Operations Command) structure, most of the Special Forces involved are both very proud of their "organization heritage" and their parent organizations. But that is as integrated as most of those units want to be with their fellow "operators" in the other service arms. There is also something to be said about the units having a rivalry in the first place. It drives both sides to be better.

That and in keeping with not doing things that threaten your own turf. The respective SF branch level commanders would be likely to fight that, as it threatens their own jobs and authority.

If "Special Forces" becomes a service branch in its own right, then what makes a SEAL different from a Green Beret, MARSOC, or AirForce Special Tactics at that point? Also, what would the "Special Forces" branch do with the people who joined, then washed out of training? Discharge them?

If everyone is "special" then nobody is. So an entire branch dedicated to Special Forces also works against what they're even supposed to be. Sure there might be some benefits from combining them all under a single military branch/department, but it comes with a laundry list of other problems as a consequence. Including fights over funding.

If the Navy and the Army no longer have any Special Forces of their own, then they have no reason to prioritize funding for them in order to rub it in the nose of the other(a case where rivalry is useful). Now they have reason to lobby for funding given to Special Forces to be cut, because it's "not their baby" anymore(a case where eliminating a rivalry is bad).

Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

"*Considers the legality of defenestration.*"

We could trade alibis.

bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

lazy and selfish SOBs that only think they should get whatever they want.

That seems to describe a sizeable percentage of the general population. (many of whom belong in Gen Pop, but that's another issue)

Crumbly Writer ๐Ÿšซ

@Pixy

You could also simply delete the story and re-post it under the new pseudonym.

If you're dealing with a group of stories, it's always best to ask an Admin to help shift them to a new pseudonym. As much as alternate pseudonyms can help a story find its target audience, you also have many readers who are eager to read whatever you write, regardless of content, simply based on the way you write stories, so don't discount either group.

Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@D. Fritz

Just continue as you go as there is no one clear demographic to Stories on line.

The site started as a Story Site that included sex stories and no-sex stories. That was a really big thing twenty years ago as all of the other sites were either all sex stories or no sex stories - that's still very much the case today.

Over the last few years I've noticed there two largest groups of readers are those who want heavy sex stories and those who want a good story, regardless of the sex content. The last is by far the largest group.

Regardless of how you post some people will complain. I write stories where the story chapter is whatever is needed to tell what I want to say in that chapter - thus some are only a hundred words long and some are several thousand words long. However, when I post the story to SoL and the sister sites of Fine Stories (no-sex stories only) and SciFi Stories (science fiction genre stories only) I post the story in groups of chapters to have between five thousand to ten thousand words with a basic aim of about eight thousand words - I call them SoL Chapters or SoL story parts. I post a SoL chapter every other day when posting a new story, and that seems to keep the bulk of the readers happy as each post is a reasonable read. A few other authors do the same.

If you check my story list you'll see I post everything from flash stories to sag length stories with a focus on novel lengths of 40,000 to 100,000 words and cover most of the genres and everything from an almost stroke story to no sex stories. I do find I can write a better no sex story than a sex story, most of the time. There are even a few no sex stories where I started with an idea that's good for a sex story and then ended up not writing a single sex scene for the story.

By like most of us and just write what you want to write and post when you want to.

Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ

@D. Fritz

Traditional publishing has genres. Each genre has a targeted audience and the publishers publish books that follow the rules for a genre. For example, Romance novels have rules such as they must have a happily-ever-after ending, no adultery, etc. (Of course, if a novel breaks the rules and becomes a mega bestseller the publishers change the rules.)

When a traditional publisher publishes multiple genres they typically do it through imprints (name of the publishing company). And each imprint has a defined target audience.

SOL is a general "publisher." I guess Finestories and Scifistories are imprints. But SOL itself doesn't have a targeted audience so it has stuff for everyone, and that means someone isn't going to like something.

To SOL's credit, it has genre, sex content, and story codes. Readers should look at those to determine if they should read a story. If they don't, let's not blame SOL.

As to demographics, I keep hearing here that people prefer no-sex stories and skim over sex scenes. I bet the silent majority on SOL would beg to differ. I personally believe the problem is that the heavy sex stories are not stories but porn. Not because of the sex, but because of the writing (or lack of writing skills). But there's a target audience for those as well.

And don't forget we're in the social media age where people anonymously attack anything and everyone they don't like. Twitter is a great example of bullying. It's no different on SOL.

And, finally, people on SOL have agendas. Some might 1-bomb a story because it has a squick. Someone else might downgrade a story because it's not the type of story they want to read so they believe if they do that those stories won't be written and the ones they like will. There are probably even authors who downgrade other authors' stories because they think it will help their scores. And it works both ways. I've started stories with high scores that were so poorly written I stopped reading them. And some were no-sex stories so it's not the sex. Because of their high score, many people thought otherwise.

awnlee jawking ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

As to demographics, I keep hearing here that people prefer no-sex stories and skim over sex scenes. I bet the silent majority on SOL would beg to differ.

I dislike very long stories where there's an obligatory cut-and-paste sex scene every chapter. If there's a decent story arc, I'll keep reading but page down past the sex scenes after the first handful.

AJ

Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

I dislike very long stories where there's an obligatory cut-and-paste sex scene every chapter.

But that's a bad writing problem not an issue with sex scenes in general.

You'd likely do the same thing if you were reading westerns and there was a cut and paste gun fight every chapter.

awnlee jawking ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

But that's a bad writing problem not an issue with sex scenes in general.

I'm glad you said that and not me ;-)

I have no objections to sex scenes per se. I even read the odd stroke story. But for a novel-length story, I would like the sex scenes to advance the story.

AJ

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Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

I would like the sex scenes to advance the story.

I'm happy if they fit in the story naturally and don't seem forced.

My personal opinion is that there is a lot more to a good story than just the plot. Not every scene needs to advance the plot.

In fact I tend to find stories written that way (every word has to somehow advance the plot) to be a bit flat and mostly uninteresting.

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Not_a_ID ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

In fact I tend to find stories written that way (every word has to somehow advance the plot) to be a bit flat and mostly uninteresting.

Fluff is good in the right quantities. The problem is when the author introduces piles of errata into the story that doesn't meaningfully contribute to the story and simply bloats it to enormous proportions.

A 1 million word epic story where a quarter of it consists of side-stories and other things which don't really add to the story is one thing.

A 3 million word story where less than a quarter of it actually advanced the story is another entirely.

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Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Not_a_ID

Fluff is good in the right quantities.

I don't consider it "fluff".

Like I said, in my opinion, a good story is more than just the plot.

The plot, the whole plot and nothing but the plot is not a good story.

A 3 million word story where less than a quarter of it actually advanced the story is another entirely.

Agreed, at that point, you start wondering if there is a plot at all.

A good story needs a plot, but it also needs other things besides the plot.

In that sense, things can advance the story without advancing the plot. seemingly random tangents do neither.

The journey itself is as important as the destination. Slow down, smell the roses and don't be in such a hurry to get to the end as quickly as possible.

Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

A good story needs a plot, but it also needs other things besides the plot.

Subplots?

Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ
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@Switch Blayde

Subplots?

Things that are not plot at all.

A story needs a setting and props, background scenery.

Even a story sent in the present day that doesn't need
to do world building, ought to be doing at least a little bit of "set building"

awnlee jawking ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

A story needs a setting and props, background scenery.

You almost make it sound as though they're necessary for the plot ;-)

AJ

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Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ
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@awnlee jawking

You almost make it sound as though they're necessary for the plot ;-)

No. They are necessary to a complete story. They are irrelevant to the plot.

You can (and people have) rewrite Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet to put it in different times and places without actually changing the plot.

You can take the same murder mystery plot and set it in a 1000 different cities, a 100 different times.

Despite this, the murder mystery plot by itself, separated from time and place, will always be less than a fully developed story based on that plot.

Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

A story needs a setting and props, background scenery.

This is from an article by Nathan Bransford called "How to know what to cut from a novel." He's was a literary agent turned novelist and I've read good information from him in the past.

The very first one is titled: "Scenes that merely exist to "introduce" characters or a setting."

Often writers make the mistake of padding their openings with scenes whose sole purpose is to establish a particular character or a setting and don't otherwise advance the story. These chapters usually end up feeling unnecessary and a bit confusing because nothing at all important is happening.

Instead: Introduce characters and settings in the course of telling the actual story.

We don't need an entire scene where nothing substantive happens just to get to know a character or provide exhaustive exposition. Just pick up where the story actually begins and trust that you can fill in the other details as you go along.

It's much better to get to know a character in the course of the story unfolding than in an otherwise meaningless scene.

Even if you want to show what your protagonist's "normal" world is like before things get knocked off kilter and the plot gets going, give them a mini-quest in the beginning to pull the reader through the opening.

You always need to be telling a story and keeping your protagonist active and motivated. Cut anywhere that's not happening and fold the exposition in elsewhere.

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Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ
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@Switch Blayde

The very first one is titled: "Scenes that merely exist to "introduce" characters or a setting."

Edited:

If you assumed I was suggesting that there should be separate scenes wholly dedicated to just "set building" and what not, you are mistaken.

But those mixed scenes would necessarily be significantly larger than they would if they were restricted only to those things that directly advanced the plot.

And the mini-quest mentioned is still something separate from the story's plot. And a sex scene would actually fall into that description.

"Get into that girl's pants" would qualify as a mini-quest. And then kick off the real plot with the MC getting caught with his pants down. :)

Can an author throw things in a story that I would agree are "fluff"? Yes. But "set building", costuming and props are not fluff, and they are not part of the plot, but they are every bit as necessary to a complete story as the plot is.

Additional ETA:

I would also read that advice as at least partly based on limitations of physical paper books, limitations that shouldn't necessarily apply here or in e-books generally.

Maybe it's still good advice, but outside of dead tree publishing, it should be reconsidered separately from scratch.

It is not an unmitigated good to drag all the conventions and baggage of dead tree publishing into e-books and on-line stories.

Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

It is not an unmitigated good to drag all the conventions and baggage of dead tree publishing into e-books and on-line stories.

I also don't mean to suggest that it would be an unmitigated evil either.

I think that both "This is the way we've always done it" and "all change is good, change for the sake of change" are grave errors in thinking.

Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ
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@Dominions Son

And the mini-quest mentioned is still something separate from the story's plot.

Description is not plot, and description is needed. Not every word written advances the plot. Or even builds characters.

I thought what was suggested was that you can have a chapter that doesn't advance the plot.

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Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

I thought what was suggested was that you can have a chapter that doesn't advance the plot.

Isn't that exactly what your chosen authority's introductory "mini-quest" is?

Crumbly Writer ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

Subplots?

A bunch of little plotlings?

Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

The journey itself is as important as the destination. Slow down, smell the roses and don't be in such a hurry to get to the end as quickly as possible.

That's true, but when have the story seems to be an internal discussion as to the significance of what the painter is trying to express in the painting Blue Poles, then you have to start wondering what the hell is the point of the story.

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Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Ernest Bywater

but when have the story seems to be an internal discussion as to the significance of what the painter is trying to express in the painting Blue Poles, then you have to start wondering what the hell is the point of the story.

Yes, if a story has no plot, or if it goes off the rails completely and loses or abandons the plot that's a bad thing.

However, a good story is more than just the plot. It needs a set, scenery, costumes and props.

A story paired down to the plot, the whole plot and nothing but the plot is like watching actors in their street clothes rehearse a play on a bare stage.

You might be able to get the point of the play that way, but it will never be as interesting, as fun, or as powerful as the full production.

Crumbly Writer ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

In fact I tend to find stories written that way (every word has to somehow advance the plot) to be a bit flat and mostly uninteresting.

Qualify that somewhat: the scenes should either advance the plot OR feature character development, but if the story is overly focused, it will also become dry and listless, as the story has no 'life' to it.

Not_a_ID ๐Ÿšซ
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@Dominions Son

You'd likely do the same thing if you were reading westerns and there was a cut and paste gun fight every chapter.

I know I certainly have that complaint about a certain Science Fiction franchise where they seemed to be determined to give me "a visually stunning action scene" in every episode. Because evidently they thought that franchise was previously known for their fans being very rabid action junkies?

Crumbly Writer ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

But that's a bad writing problem not an issue with sex scenes in general.

You'd likely do the same thing if you were reading westerns and there was a cut and paste gun fight every chapter.

Or supposedly 'military' stories which are nothing but 'Gun-Porn', where the main focus is waxing lyrically about the mechanics of particular guns. If the manufacturing details of the story has no role in the overall plot, then WHY include it (i.e. they're targeting obsessed ex military members, rather than readers interested in the genre).

Not_a_ID ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

I dislike very long stories where there's an obligatory cut-and-paste sex scene every chapter. If there's a decent story arc, I'll keep reading but page down past the sex scenes after the first handful.

I'm a bit more mixed, but do generally agree that for many stories I am reading. I do start to get annoyed at the authors who do the "obligatory sex scene every chapter" thing, and have started skipping/skimming through some of them.

As Ernest said, for me at least, it normally is about being a venue for stories that can have sex in it more than it is about having a story that is dripping with sex every time you turn a corner.

Although those stories can be an enjoyable read from time to time as well. ;)

Michael Loucks ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

I dislike very long stories where there's an obligatory cut-and-paste sex scene every chapter. If there's a decent story arc, I'll keep reading but page down past the sex scenes after the first handful.

I had a number of people make this point, and that led to a significant reduction in sex scenes in my series, and after the 'honeymoon period' in the upcoming book in my 'Good Medicine' series, it's basically zero sex.

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Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ

@Michael Loucks

and after the 'honeymoon period' in the upcoming book in my 'Good Medicine' series, it's basically zero sex.

Then we need the opposite of the "slow" story code. "Slow" means it takes a while for the sex to begin. The new code would reflect sex in the beginning but then no more.

That suggestion was tongue-in-cheek, of course.

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Crumbly Writer ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

Then we need the opposite of the "slow" story code. "Slow" means it takes a while for the sex to begin. The new code would reflect sex in the beginning but then no more.

That suggestion was tongue-in-cheek, of course.

'Stalled,' perhaps? ;)

StarFleet Carl ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

But SOL itself doesn't have a targeted audience so it has stuff for everyone, and that means someone isn't going to like something.

That reminds me of the grief that Baen Books got for publishing John Ringo's 'Ghost'. How DARE a science/military fiction publisher put something out with pornography in it!

Since I'm somewhat ideologically to the right of Atilla the Hun (kill 'em all, and who cares whether God sorts 'em out or not), yet at the same time, I have no issues with some good old down and dirty sex (or clean and puritan sex, bad new up and clean sex, or whatever, so longs as it's consensual and the parties are old enough to give consent, however many there are), I appreciate so many of the older stories on SOL, where the author tied the sex in.

That's the biggest issue with a lot of books today, IMHO. They want to pretend that sex doesn't happen in EVERY society. And it obviously does.

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awnlee jawking ๐Ÿšซ

@StarFleet Carl

They want to pretend that sex doesn't happen in EVERY society. And it obviously does.

Except the ones we don't know about because they Darwinised themselves ;-)

AJ

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Not_a_ID ๐Ÿšซ

@awnlee jawking

Except the ones we don't know about because they Darwinised themselves ;-)

There were a couple of those in 19th Century America as I recall. Their faith/sect only lasted as long as they could obtain and retain new converts. As they otherwise abstained from sex, the groups eventually died out for obvious reasons.

Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

I keep hearing here that people prefer no-sex stories and skim over sex scenes.

The main reason I'll skip over sex scenes in a particular story is because after the third sex scenes you're seeing the same scene again with only minor word changes, if any, other than the names. Thus the scenes get extremely boring and annoying. There are a few authors who've been able to make each sex scene different, and those are the ones where I will read the sex scenes.

The other time I skip sex scenes is when they actually disrupt the story as it seems the author thought he should have sex scenes and decides to throw one in at random points.

Apart from some early works before I learned my lesson on such issues I now restrict sex scenes to where they are actually a part of the plot or progress the story / plot in a useful way. That doesn't mean I won't end up writing another stroke like story at some point, just that they're few and far between now.

Michael Loucks ๐Ÿšซ
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@Switch Blayde

SOL is a general "publisher." I guess Finestories and Scifistories are imprints. But SOL itself doesn't have a targeted audience so it has stuff for everyone, and that means someone isn't going to like something.

WLPC - World Literature Publishing Corporation - is the publisher. SOL, FineStories, SciFiStories, et al, are the imprints. At least as I understand how things work.

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Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ

@Michael Loucks

WLPC - World Literature Publishing Corporation - is the publisher. SOL, FineStories, SciFiStories, et al, are the imprints

Except WLPC doesn't publish anything. It's more the legal entity behind the scenes.

I don't see SOL as an imprint. It's too generic. That's why I've said in the past that now that there's Finestories and Scifistories, SOL should be the adult-content site.

People who want no sex stories, go to Finestories.
People who want SciFi stories (with no sex), go to Scifistories.
People who want stories with adult content, go to SOL.

It's my understanding that stories on Finestories and Scifistories are also on SOL. No wonder the demographics for SOL is so confusing.

Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

People who want SciFi stories (with no sex), go to Scifistories.

My understanding is that Scifistories allows adult content.

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Crumbly Writer ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

My understanding is that Scifistories allows adult content.

It does, and I've also had several FineStories stories which feature 'adult content' (discussions of rape, incest and/or death) but which didn't exclude the requisite detailed scenes. I figure that there's a wide range of readers at the site, and they aren't necessarily looking for overly sanitized stories. Sometimes, it's nice reading a 'serious' story without having sex, death and violence graphically shoved into your face every single chapter!

Keet ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

People who want no sex stories, go to Finestories.

But there are a lot of very good no/minimal/some sex stories you will miss if you limit yourself to Finestories to avoid the much sex/stroke stories.

People who want SciFi stories (with no sex), go to Scifistories.

Scifistories has stories with sex although mostly minimal (Age rating 'Older than 17').

People who want stories with adult content, go to SOL.

Yep, and a lot who want less sex too since it's all there ;)

It's my understanding that stories on Finestories and Scifistories are also on SOL. No wonder the demographics for SOL is so confusing.

There are reasons for that. First of course is the much bigger audience on SOL. The other sites still need more time to mature, it will happen, but it takes time.
Even a little sex, maybe just a single scene, disqualifies a story for Finestories. Too many (very good!) stories do have a little sex where it supports the story but they will have to reside on SOL, not Finestories. Scifistories is more lenient at that point but is of course limited to science fiction stories. Some authors have a different version of a story on Finestories where the sex scenes are removed. They are often better than the SOL version.

The real problem is that there's no consistency in how authors qualify their stories with the amount of sex. You can find 'Some sex' stories that have less sex than a 'Minimal sex' story, or 'Some sex' stories that have more sex than a 'Much sex' story. Impossible to filter on, for example, "Only stories with 'Some Sex' or less". If those filters would be accurate everyone could see exactly what he wants or doesn't want.

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Crumbly Writer ๐Ÿšซ

@Keet

Even a little sex, maybe just a single scene, disqualifies a story for Finestories.

If you care to put in the extra work, I've always found it relatively easy to 'sanitize' my sexy chapters to make them 'safe' for FineStories (i.e. I set aside chapters just for posting to FineStories). You really don't have to change the story, just avoid the descriptive sex scenes, but talking about what happened off-scene is entirely fitting.

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Keet ๐Ÿšซ

@Crumbly Writer

If you care to put in the extra work, I've always found it relatively easy to 'sanitize' my sexy chapters to make them 'safe' for FineStories (i.e. I set aside chapters just for posting to FineStories).

Of course, but you must be willing to put in the extra effort so it can be posted to Finestories. I appreciate authors who make that effort. I download all stories when complete and if the same story is on Finestories I usually prefer that version.

Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

It's my understanding that stories on Finestories and Scifistories are also on SOL.

While there are many authors who do post on all of the sites, that's not the case, and there are some stories that are on one site and not the others, despite being able to post to them all.

What I greatly appreciate about SoL is it's the only site where I can post all of my stories without having to worry about someone bitching and having a story pulled. Although Bookapy is also in the same category for having everything.

StarFleet Carl ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

People who want SciFi stories (with no sex), go to Scifistories.

You can have SciFi stories with sex in them on SciFiStories. But the main story plot has to be SciFi or related, and you have to specify above age 17. I have Love Never Changes, A True History Book One, and I'm posting A True History Book Two on that site now, as a payback to Laz for hosting this site.

I've had people ask me what SOL is, because they know about that site, but not this one.

bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

I keep hearing here that people prefer no-sex stories and skim over sex scenes.

Sometimes, I do this. But usually it's when the author just isn't very good at writing sex scenes. There's any number of flaws in 'sex writing' that'll cause me to scroll past - taking 'kink shortcuts' (many kinks have a handy trigger than writers will hammer to especially appeal to the fans of that kink... and while I'll read certain kink-friendly stories even if it's not my kink, when the writer takes those shortcuts, I lose interest in the sex scenes) or the 'play by play with color commentary' sex, where the scene reads like the couple/trio/group is having phone sex since NOTHING HAPPENS except dialog, usually dialog that reads like disinterested porno actors doing a voiceover... or jumping perspectives during sex, or shifting verb tenses, or changing narrative voice from third to first, etc.

Crumbly Writer ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

To SOL's credit, it has genre, sex content, and story codes. Readers should look at those to determine if they should read a story.

Unfortunately, the SOL codes are almost exclusively sexual (i.e. "black", "Asian", and many others only cover sexual kinks (ex: big black men raping poor, helpless white women, until some 'helpful' white guy comes by and 'rescues' them by killing the blacks). For my last couple stories, I've had to specifically warn Lazeez NOT to label my stories based on the title of various chapters, as it was NOT a Rape fantasy or a Asian kink story, it just dealt with the stories in a couple chapters.

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bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Crumbly Writer

Unfortunately, the SOL codes are almost exclusively sexual

That's because for most people, various sexual squicks are the most important thing to avoid. (Yes, those with PTSD from combat probably don't want war stories, and there's stories I've seen caution flagged because certain behaviors - like self-injury - tend to trigger some who've had issues with those subjects, but in general, sexual content is more visceral to most.)

D. Fritz ๐Ÿšซ

A few thoughts after reading all the new posts in this thread ...

I couldn't help but think of a movie where there are one or more nude / sex scenes in the first half, but then the story takes over and the rest of the film is a resolution of the plot. The sex is used to help kook the reader, then hopefully he is engaged with the story and wants to continue to see how the story ends.

As a few of you mentioned (pixy, mushroom), I had a similar intent to push the limits with my Amy's Adventures story. I had considered naming it something with the word "absurd" or "absurdity" in the title! Twelve inch dicks that can cum a half-dozen times in an hour, tits the size of watermelons on a 135lb woman, etc. In hindsight, I don't think I pushed nearly as hard as I wanted, let alone approach the level of what is available on the site, but it was a stretch for me, especially for a third story.

Switch Blayde mentioned the silent majority in a reply. I would tend to agree that there is probably a non-trivial portion of the audience on the site that is here for a quick fix of written porn and doesn't want to be bothered by a lot of story plot. We'll never really know how many fall into this category, though.

Remus2 ๐Ÿšซ

@D. Fritz

I'm one of those people who believes any element of the story should fit. Gratuitous sex, violence, drugs, etc just to have it in the story (with no logical progression) is to me, a bad move. That's my opinion.

Sex is a part of the human condition. The human population would die off in less than 100 years if humanity as a whole one day decided to not have sex anymore. Stories that pretend it doesn't happen are not being realistic; neither are stories that have the characters having sex 24/7.

Trying to make everyone happy is an exercise in futility. You may as well try sweeping the tide back with a broom.

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LupusDei ๐Ÿšซ
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@Remus2

You may as well try sweeping the tide back with a broom.

You obviously have never seen Soviet women janitors in the melting snow.

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Remus2 ๐Ÿšซ

@LupusDei

They were no longer Soviet at the time, but I did happen to see a number of them trying to clean snow off paths late spring in Norilsk, Siberia. So I take your meaning.

Uther_Pendragon ๐Ÿšซ

@D. Fritz

When you post the story, you get a question called :sex content."
If you get that accurately, then they don't have the right to complain -- which doesn't mean that they won't.

bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@D. Fritz

Readers that look for stroke content only are basically two groups - a younger demographic, and those specifically interested in their own particular kink only. I figure that's probably thirty percent of the free membership, and less than five percent of 'premium'.

Those looking for stories with sexual content are probably at least half of each group. Note that the threshold for acceptance of more sexual content will depend on how closely the sexual content matches those readers' preferences, tho...

And maybe ten percent, if that, will be looking for no-sex stories. Note they're more likely to be vocal than other groups.

As to length preference? Those here for stroke mainly are going to read the shorter stories. Certain kink-specific preferences will be at play - mind control, magic, harem, and a couple other content types lend themselves to longer works, while interracial or rape or various fetishes are pretty much just there for the quick stroker (incest stories tend to bridge the gap, there's some epics and a lot of shorter works). Those here primarily for the story (with or without sex) generally want longer stories.

Keet ๐Ÿšซ

@bk69

Readers that look for stroke content only are basically two groups - a younger demographic, and those specifically interested in their own particular kink only. I figure that's probably thirty percent of the free membership, and less than five percent of 'premium'.

Not sure about your percentage estimate but you're right that it's probably the group with the lowest interest in a premium membership.

Those looking for stories with sexual content are probably at least half of each group. Note that the threshold for acceptance of more sexual content will depend on how closely the sexual content matches those readers' preferences, tho...

And maybe ten percent, if that, will be looking for no-sex stories. Note they're more likely to be vocal than other groups.

I think the readership is more diverse with many different groups vaguely focusing on one or more levels of sex content. I also think that there is a large group just looking for good stories without much preference in how much sex they contain. Generally I find that the more sex, the less of a good story, unless of course you're a reader specifically looking for the sex. I think most readers have found a way to filter out those stories they are most interested in.
Your 10% estimate for a group specifically looking for no-sex stories is way too high, those readers will be on Finestories and maybe just occasionally visit SOL.

I might be mistaking but over the last decade I seem to detect a trend that separates the readership either towards stories with more sex or less sex. Just a feeling I get reading comments on the forum etc.

awnlee jawking ๐Ÿšซ

@bk69

Readers that look for stroke content only are basically two groups - a younger demographic, and those specifically interested in their own particular kink only.

I don't resemble that remark.

I'm not the younger demographic, and I know I won't find my particular kink. But that doesn't stop me enjoying a well-written stroke story. I've even edited/proofread quite a few.

AJ

daisydesiree ๐Ÿšซ
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@bk69

Readers that look for stroke content only are basically two groups - a younger demographic, and those specifically interested in their own particular kink only.

I disagree. I've had older guys share that my story helped them have a "fun time". I don't write for the purpose of getting guys off but if they do then that's great. I'm happy that my fingers through my keyboard could touch him.

If I read a well-written sensual scene I get feelings. Isn't the main point of SOL is for people to possibly get turned on and if it's clothed in a good story then all the better.

whisperclaw ๐Ÿšซ

Part of me thinks that it would be mighty interesting to pull the last 12 months worth of reader stats and create charts for the popularity of no-sex vs the various levels of sex content, then another chart for all the various tags.

The other part of me realizes this would quickly result in writers targeting the top tags, which would then reinforce those tags as more and more new content would come out. Much the way PornHub has been taken over by "step-" sex (stepbrother, step-father, etc) even for many videos that clearly have no such relation.

So finally I circle back to the best advice: write what you want. At the very least you'll please yourself, and if it's well written you'll please others too.

awnlee jawking ๐Ÿšซ

@whisperclaw

I'm not sure about tags, but it's reasonably obvious what sort of story themes attract the highest readership and highest scores. You can't go far wrong with a combat-veteran marine, for example.

Most of my writing overall is science fiction. Although it scores highly here, I'm trying to diversify as a writer so I've tried to avoid Sci-Fi themes in my SOL stories.

I've also tried to avoid characters that could be described as all-American stereotypical heroes. And none of my characters have 12 inch penises ;-)

AJ

Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@whisperclaw

Part of me thinks that it would be mighty interesting to pull the last 12 months worth of reader stats and create charts for the popularity of no-sex vs the various levels of sex content, then another chart for all the various tags.

I didn't do an analysis of the various tags, but back in July 2017 and April 2018 I did do an analysis of the stories based on the five sex categories and the scores the stories got. While they're several months apart the figures shown are reasonably consistent over the 2 periods. I did the work in response to a similar thread to this back then. Check the files as I think a few people will be surprised at what they show.

The interesting stats are the No sex stories make up just over 10% of the total number of stories and just over 53% are in the Much Sex group.

The files are available on my DropBox site as Sol Stats ...

https://www.dropbox.com/sh/ebk8ve052m0c1rs/AACohN7e_x8OuRFrn0EbQ2L6a?dl=0

GreyWolf ๐Ÿšซ

I'm not sure who best to reply to, so I'm replying to the thread. For my story, I went with 'Some Sex'. It takes until Chapter 11 for any sex to turn up (yes, it's also coded 'slow'). I'd say about 25 chapters out of 89 contain some amount of sex (arbitrarily defining 'sex' as second base or further; there's kissing in many more than 25 chapters).

On the 'reader' side, I'll happily read things that are 'Much Sex', if there's a good plot. And things that are 'No Sex', though that can feel off if the characters seem to have a lot of chemistry but we're missing a big part of how that plays out. Slow is just fine.

I'm not interested in too much repetition of sex scenes with the same partner unless they're trying something new. How much to skim or omit is situational, but, when someone's new, I want to present the whole encounter. Not so much when it's another night together and there's nothing new. As a reader, if sex has been part of the plot and then it moves offstage with a new partner, that would be weird. But, for characters who have a lot of partners, the 'sex' part of an encounter with their 50th new partner probably doesn't need the same level of physical detail as the second or third.

Basically, it's serving the plot. The first time the characters are naked in bed together, what happens advances the plot. They're getting to know each other, understand each other. Ditto with trying something new. And it would be different if the scene was so the reader could see that they'd gotten stale, or if someone is reacting out of character. Sometimes a 'routine' sexual encounter produces interesting dialogue, but that can be written as: 'two hours later, we were naked in bed, exhausted and happy, and ... [conversation happens]'.

If you're at 'Some Sex' or below, the reader shouldn't (IMHO) be expecting a 'stroke story', and it's fine to tell them to go read something else if they wanted more. Even 'Much Sex' might or might not mean 'stroke'; that depends a lot on how much else is going on. But 'Much' is a grayer area.

Just in terms of posting, it's an interesting question. Again - chapter 11 before anything much happens (and that's second base), yet the story says 'Some Sex' and I coded everything that happens in the book. Readers might be waiting on the edge of their seats for these things to actually happen, especially at four chapters a week. Three weeks! I also had to decide whether coding something that happens forty-plus chapters in is 'fair'. But, once the entire book is published, the codes will be there, so it seems fair.

So far, no one has complained that it's too slow or lacking what they're looking for - knock on wood - so I'm just being my own harshest critic, perhaps.

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bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@GreyWolf

I also had to decide whether coding something that happens forty-plus chapters in is 'fair'.

Not only fair, but necessary.

Otherwise, you're deceiving readers. You could induce those who would otherwise give your story a hard pass to waste their time on your story. Do you have any way to give them back the time they spent on your story, only to find they didn't want to read it because you intended to include content they object to?

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GreyWolf ๐Ÿšซ

@bk69

Completely fair point, and that's why I coded it the way that I did. More information is better, and that's one of the reasons the 'slow' code exists in the first place.

On the other hand, that's always a risk. There's a subtheme in my story that may very well result in one particular code being applicable. It's not applicable now, and it won't be applicable anytime soon, but anyone reading the story would know it could happen one day.

So, if something happens in e.g. Book 5, which will be on the order of over a million words in, that someone didn't want to read, there's not a great way to handle that. That's particularly true since I really can't say for sure that it will or won't happen (meaning, at this point I don't know). In this particular case it's so heavily foreshadowed, the possibility discussed, re-discussed, re-re-discussed, and so forth, that no one could get there by accident.

Within a single book, though - if you have the book written or outlined enough to know what the codes are, I agree, they need to be there. And if you don't, you'd have to tell the reader "I don't know where this is going, sorry. Read at your own risk." I'm saying that in deference to open-ended authors who very likely don't know where their story will be a year or two or three from now. Mine is settled within the book I'm posting, but future books? Not settled.

Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@GreyWolf

I also had to decide whether coding something that happens forty-plus chapters in is 'fair'.

I was reading a very long story that had a very good premise, then at about chapter 60 of 100 plus chapters there is one extremely heavy BDSM scene that was not only not coded for at all, but there was no warning until you hit it. I never did finish that story and that author is on my 'do not read or recommend' list as I now know I can never trust them to doe a story properly or to have an appropriate description for a story. I've very few authors on that list, and each made it for the same type of crap - not coding something that should've been coded. I'll forgive poor writing, bad plots, silly plots, and almost anything but what is the literary equivalent of a bait and switch by giving information to encourage reading but not mentioning extreme material that would discourage reading.

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bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Ernest Bywater

Out of curiosity, what was the story? And how extreme was the Scene scene?

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Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@bk69

It was so long ago that I don't remember the story name, I'd guess about a decade ago. At the time I did complain to Lazeez and he checked the story then he added codes he felt it should have. He also added codes to a couple of other stories by the author involved. Of the author list only acolodude still has stories on SoL, but I'm not sure if it was one of his stories or not. Heck, I may have the story length wrong, but it was a long one and the scene was just after halfway, with a long scene and enough extreme bdsm and torture to upset me, even after some of the stuff I've written along the lines of bdsm and bondage.

I suspect a large part of the issue for me was that it was not needed for the story as it was up to that point (I can't speak of after that as I didn't finish the story), and it was so extreme without any warning or indications to expect it at all.

NB: I have some memory issues from 2005 to 2013 due to medications I was on at that time. Thus I suspect the story is from that period, but, again, I'm not sure as I tried hard to forget about it.

Grey Wolf ๐Ÿšซ

@Ernest Bywater

This brings up an interesting point. Heavy BDSM is obvious; it's a code, you go with it. The question is on things in another area. For instance, rape. Per a very specific description in the Author Agreement, rape that isn't described isn't coded 'rape'. That's all well and good - a reader might be looking for a rape story and it wouldn't be one.

On the other hand, a character getting raped and suffering major trauma and consequences is a huge story element that might truly upset readers. 'Caution' seems to apply, but 'caution' is super-broad. Someone being badly injured in a traffic accident and having to deal with it might be 'caution' to some readers.

It's easy to work with codes that unquestionably should be there. BDSM, in that example, counts. Not coding it is a mistake. But the 'caution' catch-all is more interesting; if one doesn't code 'caution' and something significant that might upset some readers happens, is that a failing?

Most long stories that are capturing someone's life are going to have significantly negative things happen; do they have an implicit 'caution'? I struggle with how to deal with that; it would both lose impact and cause the reader to constantly be guessing who will be the victim if you, e.g., write in a forward: 'Someone's going to get raped and have a major life crisis; be ready.' But someone who's sensitive to rape might be thoroughly upset if they find a character they've come to love suffering that way.

And I'm choosing that as an example because no one gets raped in Book 1 of my story, so it's not a spoiler. Doesn't mean it can't happen later - I don't know much of what will happen in later books; my characters haven't told me yet. And it definitely doesn't mean that nothing bad happens to anyone in Book 1, or that there aren't some parts that might be difficult for some people.

Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ

@Grey Wolf

rape that isn't described isn't coded 'rape'.

According to the definition of the "rape" story code, non-consensual sex because of blackmail, coercion, drugs, etc. is not rape. I've had readers complain that I did not have the rape code in those kinds of stories. Why would someone who doesn't like non-consensual sex read a story with the "non-consent" tag?

I'm sorry, but I expect my readers to be open-minded. Tolerant. If it makes for a good story, live with it. I don't know why SOL readers are so sensitive.

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Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

I don't know why SOL readers are so sensitive.

I don't thing most are, but the few who are, are very vocal about it.

Why would someone who doesn't like non-consensual sex read a story with the "non-consent" tag?

I had a reader once complain about something coded for in one of my stories (not non-consent). When I pointed out it was coded for, the response was "But I thought it would be off-stage".

Some people can't be helped and some are actively looking for something to be offended about.

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Remus2 ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

some are actively looking for something to be offended about.

A story could be about nuns running an orphanage that saves hundreds of children.
It could also be about cultist shagging sheep in the Pakistani Highlands.

Someone somewhere is going to be offended by either story.

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bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Remus2

It could also be about cultist shagging sheep in the Pakistani Highlands.

Aren't they more commonly goat fucking types there?

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Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@bk69

Aren't they more commonly goat fucking types there?

Sure, but those aren't the "cultists". :)

Grey Wolf ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

From a tag standpoint, I agree, it's 'NonConsent' and not 'Rape'. From an ethical standpoint, rape, in my opinion, but the tag specifically says 'violent'.

'NonConsent' really does adequately cover those other cases (of course, there are also specific tags for blackmail, coercion, and drugged, so those narrow it down).

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Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ

@Grey Wolf

From a tag standpoint, I agree, it's 'NonConsent' and not 'Rape'. From an ethical standpoint, rape, in my opinion, but the tag specifically says 'violent'.

From a legal standpoint, consensual sex with someone below the age of consent is rape โ€” statutory rape.

Grey Wolf ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

Agree, and it's a factor in my story, but only in the sense that everyone who is affected (which is pretty much everyone) is nonetheless legal under state law at the time (not under fourteen and within two years).

There may well be off-page pairings discussed which do not meet that threshold, but that's not within the story proper.

At the risk of a truly minor spoiler, "Romeo and Juliet Laws" will be a plot point in Book 3.

richardshagrin ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

statutory rape

Can someone rape a statue?

Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@richardshagrin

Can someone rape a statue?

Ayep, the idiot woke crowd have been raping statues all year long.

Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ

@richardshagrin

Can someone rape a statue?

It's been happening a lot lately with statues of men people all of a sudden don't like, like Christopher Columbus. Even Jefferson. They have been raped (abused).

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Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

It's been happening a lot lately with statues of men people all of a sudden don't like, like Christopher Columbus. Even Jefferson. They have been raped (abused).

They even did a statute of a long time abolitionist who joined the Union Army specifically to fight against slavery.

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Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

They even did a statute of a long time abolitionist who joined the Union Army specifically to fight against slavery.

And are trying to remove one of President Lincoln right now in DC, that was erected by a Freedmans's Group. The founding member of which put up the money from her first pay as a free woman.

Then people wonder why I laugh when I call Progressives "Reactionaries".

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Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ
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@Mushroom

And are trying to remove one of President Lincoln

They recently put up a statue with Susan B. Anthony and I believe Elizabeth Cady Stanton. Why put up a statue of racists?

The disagreements at that convention led not only to the dissolution of AERA, but a split in the women's suffrage movement between those who supported the 15th Amendment and those who did not. Stanton and Anthony joined the faction that did not; and after the amendment passed, many of the suffragists on that side pandered to white southerners by arguing that that if white women could vote, they could drown out the Black male vote.

Anthony also sought to distance her work from Douglass, who continued to support women's suffrage for the rest of his life. During an 1890s suffrage meeting in Atlanta, she asked him not to appear onstage with white women because it would seem inappropriate.

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Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

They recently put up a statue with Susan B. Anthony and I believe Elizabeth Cady Stanton. Why put up a statue of racists?

Or proudly getting awards in the name of Margaret Sanger. Quite a few women today proudly proclaim her works. Yet, she was a racist, an anti-immigrant, supported forced sterilization of the mentally ill and retarded (as well as keeping them locked away from society), and was a huge believer in eugenics, and that through birth control whites would be able to outbreed blacks until they became a minor group in the country. The KKK were frequent donors to her programs, and she often spoke to women's groups of the organization.

Oh, and who was strongly anti-abortion, unless it was to save the life of the mother. She was strongly against it as a form of birth control.

Yet, I find it ironic that many almost want her canonized. Yet after a statue of staunch abolitionist and civil war hero Hans Christian Heg (he was killed fighting for the Union) was torn down and decapitated by BLM marchers, that his statue should be replaced by one of Sanger.

Not_a_ID ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

It's been happening a lot lately with statues of men people all of a sudden don't like, like Christopher Columbus. Even Jefferson. They have been raped (abused).

Columbus is hardly shocking, they've been tearing him down in just about every conceivable way since the 1980's.

Jefferson has also been undergoing deconstruction for decades now as well. People going after his likeness was basically predicted after the Civil War stuff was targeted.

The ones that surprised me this year were Lincoln(Native American issues), Grant(Native American issues, and having owned a slave for a year before freeing him), and Theodore Roosevelt(Native American issues).

Not_a_ID ๐Ÿšซ

@richardshagrin

statutory rape



Can someone rape a statue?

That would be statuary rape rather than statutory.

Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@Grey Wolf

On the other hand, a character getting raped and suffering major trauma and consequences is a huge story element that might truly upset readers. 'Caution' seems to apply, but 'caution' is super-broad.

That's where you can include something in the story description to help describe what you just said. There you can say something like 'A rape victim has ..' and not use the rape code since it's not on screen. Another option I have seen used by others is someone describes another character and says, 'watch what you say to her as she's a victim of severe rape and a bit touchy about some subjects.'

The codes are meant for what occurs on screen, and that's how I try to use them.

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Grey Wolf ๐Ÿšซ

@Ernest Bywater

I might do that to the side; the problem is the loss of surprise and the addition of pointless suspense. If I say 'someone gets raped', there's no surprise when it happens. That surprise is important, I think. And there's unintended suspense: Who? When? Is it about to happen? That's suspense I didn't build into the story. It also makes very light foreshadowing into heavy foreshadowing. If character X is a little 'edgy', instead of it explaining bad behavior later, everyone's suddenly staring at them as the potential rapist.

'Caution' covers it without unnecessarily tipping the author's hand, but it also is, to me, almost implied.

I can think of specific story situations in major, well-regarded SOL stories (some of Michael Loucks' stories, G Younger's 'Stupid Boy', Aroslav's 'Transmogrification of Jacob Hopkins', Bluedragon's OSL for examples) where bad to very bad things happen to or around nice people. None of those are coded for either the bad thing or 'caution', and, in my opinion, it's appropriate that they're not. The impact of the events would be muted if someone told you that a bad thing was imminent.

None of those are 'miscoded'; the 'bad things' are simply outside the scope of the codes. Things within the codes should be properly coded.

I'd feel bad if someone was majorly upset by a bad thing I wrote that's outside the codes. I get upset by some bad things I've written! There are things that were hard to write and that upset me every time I proofread them. But that should happen, I think.

Maybe the Foreword needs a bit more of an explanation that 'it's life, and bad things do happen'?

Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@Grey Wolf

Maybe the Foreword needs a bit more of an explanation that 'it's life, and bad things do happen'?

That helps. However, It's been my experience that many don't read a foreword. You have no idea how emails I got about Boone which I answer with the simple statement - Get back to me if you still have a question after you read the foreword - So far I've had no questions from the people involved.

Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@Grey Wolf

I might do that to the side; the problem is the loss of surprise and the addition of pointless suspense. If I say 'someone gets raped', there's no surprise when it happens.

In my mind a lot will depend on the importance of the character and the incident involved. If it's a secondary character you could introduce the event in the story with a dialogue between 2 other characters who mention the person has issues due to having been raped.

As to mentioning the rape victim in the description, that's where I'd put it only if they are a central character and you want to alert people up front about how they look at things due to that. Otherwise do it in dialogue or narrative when you introduce the character involved or just before then.

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Grey Wolf ๐Ÿšซ

@Ernest Bywater

Continuing with the theme of rape, which - again - doesn't happen in Book 1, assume for the purpose of discussion that a major character is raped mid-story ('off the page'; we don't see the rape, though - for the purpose of argument - assume another character finds them immediately after, in the heart of the trauma, maybe even saves them from additional harm), and it results in major issues: breakups, trouble in school/transfer to a different school, and so forth. Saying up front 'a major character will be raped' is a giant spoiler and, I think, a net negative for the majority of readers. And it doesn't at all meet the spirit of the 'rape' tag, so it's not 'mandatory'. Indeed, I think the 'rape' tag would be misplaced.

Again, going with analogies off other stories, I can think of cases where something similar happens and neither codes nor 'caution' were involved. At some point, 'bad things happen to good people' needs to be an answer.

As noted elsewhere, however, if someone asked me privately 'does anyone suffer a rape?', and someone does, the answer would be - and has to be - 'yes', not 'wait and see'.

Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Grey Wolf

Continuing with the theme of rape, which - again - doesn't happen in Book 1, assume for the purpose of discussion that a major character is raped mid-story ('off the page'; we don't see the rape, though

A good argument for creating a universe or series and making each book it's own story on SOL rather than having one 200 chapter SOL story internally divided into "books".

With the former approach, Each book can have it's own codes, so you don't have to code up front for something that doesn't happen until 1.5M words downstream.

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Grey Wolf ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

Mine's a series; subsequent books will be their own postings. Book 1 is long (89 chapters; 325,000 words) but it's book. Book 2 will have its own codes (some of which will be different).

Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@Grey Wolf

again - doesn't happen in Book 1

Do you intend to post all the books of the story as one big story on SoL or each book as individual stories? That's important as the codes for each story should apply only to what is being posted as that story. So if one posted story is Book 1 - then code only for what happens on screen in that book; then do the same for the other books. If an on screen rape appears in book 8 the rape coded isn't needed until book 8.

only ever code for what appears on screen in the story.

Another place you could include some information if you don't want it in the description is your author blog, or as stated earlier in a foreword.

Bad things happen to good people is called life.

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Grey Wolf ๐Ÿšซ

@Ernest Bywater

Repeating from above (overlapped with your posting), each book will be its own SOL story. There's a fixed scope and I won't start posting until a book is complete from a content standpoint (Book 1 still has one editor reviewing for grammar/punctuation/etc, but the story is long since settled).

I don't mind single-story endlessly-continued works (I just read them at a point in time, then go back and reread after a long hiatus), but that's not what I want to do. And, yes, they're a nightmare from a code standpoint.

I agree - only code for what appears 'on screen'.

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bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Grey Wolf

I agree - only code for what appears 'on screen'.

However, I do believe the 'caution' tag is underused. Many stories that, for instance, involve the MC being cheated on do not have the 'cheat' tag because either the 'act' is on-screen no longer than it takes for the participants to notice the guy is in the room and sees what's happening, or he is told by a friend or something. However, since the 'cheat' code doesn't technically apply, but there should be a way of identifying such stories, 'caution' makes sense. Luckily, many such stories will mention in the description what happened...but for those that don't, I wish the writers would use 'caution'.

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Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ

@bk69

I wish the writers would use 'caution'

I think I used it once. But I think it's a cop-out and useless.

If I have something that's a squick to a reader, having the caution tag will not shield me from his wrath. He'll want to know why the specific code wasn't there.

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Grey Wolf ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

I'm not a real fan of 'caution' either. But, then, I'm drawn towards long works where it's likely that at least some bad things will happen.

If there IS a code for something, the code should be there, or the author should provide a specific 'uncoded activity ahead - read at your own risk' warning. 'Caution' doesn't excuse not coding. And 'caution' as a catch-all for uncodeable things is only very vaguely helpful to a reader.

I'm likely not going to use it, partly on the grounds that other writers who I admire don't use it and have done things that have caught me up short (and would reasonably have truly upset some people). But I'm going to warn via Foreword, blog, and possibly story description that things may happen that could bother some people.

bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

If I have something that's a squick to a reader, having the caution tag will not shield me from his wrath.

If I see a 'caution' tag, my first response is to check the writer's other work and see if there's a preferred content type that is in them and missing from the one with the caution tag (and then I'll assume that's what the tag is standing in for). But if I can't figure out what the likely reason for the code was, and I think I'd be interested in the story, and the author seems open enough to answer a direct question, I'd ask if one of my hard squicks are present. If the answer is 'no' I'd probably read the story... If there's no answer (or I expect there'd be no answer, so didn't ask) then the story goes to the 'do not read' list.

People that haven't figured out how codes are supposed to work can basically fuck off and die. Both readers who read things clearly coded to indicate they'd hate it, as well as authors who hide codes because they think that everyone would, if they just read it, absolutely love their retelling of The Crying Game.

bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Grey Wolf

Personally, I'm fine with 'caution'. However, if someone asks you "Does X happen in the story?" and this is what the caution tag was for, you should respond with "yes".
That way, anyone sufficiently motivated to avoid seriously offensive material (or trying to avoid being triggered for PTSD, SI, or addiction or other mental health issues) can quickly and easily avoid stories they should.

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Grey Wolf ๐Ÿšซ

@bk69

Absolutely. If someone wrote me to ask, I'd answer them. It's one of the few cases where I'd give one reader a 'spoiler'.

Going to blog about this in the next day or so. And update the Foreword.

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bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Grey Wolf

Totally respectable.
You're one of the good guys.

Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ
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@Grey Wolf

On the other hand, a character getting raped and suffering major trauma and consequences is a huge story element that might truly upset readers. 'Caution' seems to apply, but 'caution' is super-broad.

Hence, the way I decided to handle it. This is at the very start of the chapter:

NOTICE: This chapter will include things not added in the story codes, to include rape, sexual slavery, and genital mutilation. This is for story reasons in this chapter alone, and will not be repeated. For my own reason those tags are not added, but if they are objectionable feel free to skip to the next chapter. A brief synapses is included at the start of the next chapter to bring you up to speed if a reader decides to skip this chapter.

And I did provide a 1 paragraph description of the important things that had happened. And I will admit however that I did take special delight in having the "tool" of the rapist severed.

Which also is not something that the average "rape fetish" reader would enjoy reading.

And if other authors feel that a story needs "strong" content, I would suggest doing the same thing. Give the reader the courtesy of a warning, then after offering them to skip that chapter give a brief rundown of the story elements skipped. Ultimately, to me it is about respecting the reader.

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Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ
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@Mushroom

Which also is not something that the average "rape fetish" reader would enjoy reading.

The psychologists say rape if about control not sex.

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Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

The psychologists say rape if about control not sex.

"Rape fetishist", not "rapist".

I recognize that 98% of those readers that have a "rape fetish" are not actual rapists (or want to be raped). But I do not play that game at all, and see it as disgusting any way. Hence, why in the times I do have it, I spend time punishing the rapist if I can (as brutally as I can), and also in trying to have the one that suffered through it deal with the trauma afterwards.

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Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

I spend time punishing the rapist if I can (as brutally as I can),

The theme of my first novel is revenge. It's two subplots that come together at the end, so there are two heroes. One hero is a cop who's hunting down and murdering the men who raped his sister when she was a young girl.

I used a Development Editor on that novel. The woman told me that a hero cannot be a murder. I never used a Development Editor again. Boy, what a subjective comment.

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bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

The woman told me that a hero cannot be a murder.

That sounds like a genre-specific 'unwritten rule'. Hell, Dexter was the 'hero' of his series.... Typically, 'hero' is used equivalently to 'protagonist'... if the protagonist is a 'bad guy' it's reasonable to describe the antagonist as 'the real hero' but... most people are more accepting of grey areas now, and will cheer when the 'hero' acts in ways a golden-age comic book hero rarely would. (IIRC, Spiderman killed both the Goblin and the Hobgoblin... two highly collectible issues, but totally out of character for that era.)

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Switch Blayde ๐Ÿšซ

@bk69

That sounds like a genre-specific 'unwritten rule'.

Well, she wrote Romance so maybe it is genre specific. Just like the Romance editor told me the heroine can't commit adultery.

I recently read a Lee Child (Jack Reacher) novel called "The Affair." Reacher murdered in cold blood 3 people. First when a member of a militia confessed to shooting and killing a black boy, Reacher put a bullet through his forehead. Then he killed a Senator and the Senator's son who was a captain in the Army. Broke their necks and left them in a car in front of a speeding train. The genre is Thriller, not Romance.

Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@bk69

Dexter was the 'hero' of his series.... Typically, 'hero' is used equivalently to 'protagonist'... if the protagonist is a 'bad guy' it's reasonable to describe the antagonist as 'the real hero'

The antagonist and protagonist remain the same, but the main character is more correctly called an "antihero".

Gregor Samson, Vito and Michael Corleone, Deadpool, Hulk, Punisher, Huck Finn, even the "Man With No Name" are all antiheros. But that does not make them antagonists and those they oppose protagonists.

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bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

"Man With No Name" are all antiheros

He seems to fit the 'troubled' (more than tragic) hero better. He was usually portrayed as a man with a questionable past who was both trying to put it behind himself and be a good man in general, only to be forced by events to use his skills in the service of good. And while his actions were not always lawful (as the 'law' was often owned by the antagonist) they were both just and followed the basic 'code of the west'. (At least, I don't recall him shooting anyone in the back, or shooting anyone who wasn't within reach of a weapon.)

Grey Wolf ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

"Rape fetishist" is a good term. It distinguishes it from 'rape fantasies', which are much more often about the fantasy of relinquishing control to someone who, in the end, was not awful.

I could well write a character who wanted to play out a rape fantasy with their partner (or another selected person with whom they'd consent to be in that situation). That's totally different from a situation in which they are non-consensually forced into something, violent or not.

And such a rape fantasy wouldn't fit any of the tags except 'caution', truly. Even if there were faux-violence, if there's no actual violence and the act is consensual, it's consensual non-rape.

On the other hand, a warning isn't a bad idea at all. Someone highly sensitive to actual rape might not want to read about someone indulging in a fantasy 'rape'. However, that would likely be easy to handle in most cases, since the characters should be negotiating the events well in advance.

I could envision sidestepping negotiation with written slight-of-hand, even in a first-person story:

I almost couldn't believe the request I was making of this near-stranger; this person I only knew because my girlfriend vouched for him. Who would have?! But I'd wanted this for years, and now was my opportunity.
[Direct cut to fantasy rape with no explanation]

That would be a really bad idea, though. The slight fun of foreshadowing, then showing and surprising, isn't worth the risk of presenting something that way, when it's something one can predict people might not want to see.

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bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Grey Wolf

I had a story in development for a long time involving simulated rape. I would definitely code it as 'rape' because I doubt the people who want to avoid 'rape' stories would care if it was real or simulated.

bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Switch Blayde

...and in many cases that's true.

However, not in all cases is it completely not about sex. Sometimes, the issues are co-mingled (as in the issue - from the perp's POV - is about the control exercised by women to prevent them having sex... think 'incels'. Want sex, can't get sex except through rape (if prostitution isn't an outlet), therefor rape.)

bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

A brief synapses

'synopsis'

'synapses' is a plural for specific portions of the nerve system

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Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@bk69

'synopsis'

'synapses' is a plural for specific portions of the nerve system

*nods*

Which is why I am actually going through this story now, to catch things like that I missed the first time. But I was just doing a copy and paste to show what I have done in the past.

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bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

Wasn't sure if you'd noticed it, so figured you'd rather know than not know. Typonyms are one of the tougher catches when editing.

Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@Ernest Bywater

I was reading a very long story that had a very good premise, then at about chapter 60 of 100 plus chapters there is one extremely heavy BDSM scene that was not only not coded for at all, but there was no warning until you hit it.

I will admit that I myself have done something somewhat similar. But to provide a caveat, I did include "Caution" in the tags, but not a specific one as it is not something I find "sexy", and did not want people reading my story thinking it was all about rape.

And at the start of that chapter, I explained why I had it there for story purposes, and even told my readers it was safe to skip that chapter and move to the next one, and at the start of the next one I provided a paragraph explaining briefly what had happened that was important to the story.

That was 1 of 2 "rape scenes" I have written. The other was more of "attempted", and at the end even wrote about the horrors and statistics of sexual assault on those who are impaired. But I had to include them, as both were crucial to later character development into who they became later on.

I can "skirt the edges" of things like that, but for me it is never something done for the "enjoyment" of the reader. It is always portrayed as something horrible, but needed for character growth.

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Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

And at the start of that chapter, I explained why I had it there for story purposes, and even told my readers it was safe to skip that chapter and move to the next one, and at the start of the next one I provided a paragraph explaining briefly what had happened that was important to the story.

Actually, I could probably have lived with that, but there was no transition from nice to extreme violence or any warning to expect it. That's what made me angry.

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Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@Ernest Bywater

Actually, I could probably have lived with that, but there was no transition from nice to extreme violence or any warning to expect it. That's what made me angry.

Well, the 2 stories that included things like that were "Superhero" stories. So there was a fair amount of violence expected (not graphic, but there).

And as 3 of the 4 main superheroes who are involved in the plot are female, I saw it as part of their development into why they decided to take up that kind of life. Not trying to imply anything, other than those who suffer such attacks would be more likely to be "hyper-sensitive" and protective of others who would also be subjected to sexual abuse. And tend to take a rather "vigilante" response to any they meet in the future.

A strong "tying" moment towards the climax of the first story in the series culminates in the "team" coming together to eliminate child prostitution, and going to extreme lengths to create a place to care for those children once they are saved. Something each of them feels very strongly about on a personal level.

Pixy ๐Ÿšซ

I find the whole "Dolly thrown out of the pram" behaviour of some readers over the correct 'tagging' of stories a little bit 'weird'.

When I go to an actual bookshop, the only tags I see are 'Western', 'Cookery', 'Diy', 'Reference', etc, etc. I don't see ANY of the categories sub-divided. And yet, people get their knickers in such a twist here.

I can see why some people might get all worked up about certain codes, but life is a struggle. For the most part, we make our happiness, and deal with the shite thrown our way as best we can.

Individuals that get a little rabid when something happens 'out of the blue' in a story make me wonder if that's the least of their problems. For example; Several hundred thousand people went about their usual daily business on September 11th. No one expected what happened to happen, and the lives of millions around the world were changed instantly.

To me, the whole point of a story is that you are living someone else's life other than your own. Life isn't black and white and it ends the same for ALL of us, it's only the way we get there that's unique to us.

Anyway, back on topic. Tom Holt, writing as KJ Parker, writes a series of books that would probably make readers here throw themselves off the nearest tall building/bridge. Yet, the books don't have sub-categories on the front (or back) page, warning potential readers of content that will hit you like a shovel to the face.

Society seems to becoming more fragile in it's sensitivities. The 'woke' generation is the perfect example of this, seemingly able to find something to be offended about at the drop of the proverbial hat. The majority of the younger generation also seem to be struggling with adapting to hardship more than previous generations. Corona Lock-down is another perfect example of this. A large part of the population was PAID to stay at home in the UK, yet they still act as though they are Jews under Nazi occupation. I no longer watch the news as it inevitably has interviews with 'students' who non-stop complain about not being able to socialise/drink and complain that their University/college 'experience' is being 'ruined'. They appear to have forgotten that the point of education, is to be educated, not as an excuse to party. Since it inevitably leads to me to shouting "Grow the fuck up!" at the TV, I no longer bother with it...

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PotomacBob ๐Ÿšซ

@Pixy

They appear to have forgotten that the point of education, is to be educated, not as an excuse to party.

Partying IS part of education.

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bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@PotomacBob

Partying IS part of education.

Well, in the sense that it's part of the winnowing process universities use to reduce class sizes by the upper years... quite a few students show up, party non-stop, and flunk out. Then, some who are really intelligent can struggle to remain in for a longer while, until they learn to effectively schedule their time to allow some partying while still doing well in class. But not many hardcore partiers will go on to graduate, at least not from decent schools.

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Remus2 ๐Ÿšซ

@bk69

Well, in the sense that it's part of the winnowing process universities use to reduce class sizes by the upper years... quite a few students show up, party non-stop, and flunk out.

I doubt very seriously you'll ever find that in any academic bylaws. Having said that, in practice you're correct. In my first two years I witnessed many who flamed out due to drugs and alcohol.
If it's a rule in academia, it's a blind eye unofficial rule.

I attributed the need to work to pay my way through as the reason I didn't succumb to it myself.

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Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@Remus2

I doubt very seriously you'll ever find that in any academic bylaws. Having said that, in practice you're correct. In my first two years I witnessed many who flamed out due to drugs and alcohol.

I bet it is more likely that they were not removed, as much as they lost scholarships and other benefits (dorms) because of low GPA and simply could not afford to remain.

I knew of one kid that took 7 years to get his degree. Failed half his classes his first 2 years, was finally told to get serious or dad was going to cut him off.

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bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

I bet it is more likely that they were not removed

Depends on the school.

For a few years I was scrambling to keep my average high enough to recover from the disaster of first year. I probably should've retaken the first year courses and replaced the low marks that way (as well as actually learning sufficient material to not be floundering in later courses, and having to essentially learn multiple courses worth for each class) but...

Of course, that was in a more challenging program in a better school. Other universities I attended later were much simpler.

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@Mushroom

I bet it is more likely that they were not removed, as much as they lost scholarships and other benefits (dorms) because of low GPA and simply could not afford to remain.

The root cause in the cases I witnessed was drugs and alcohol. How it played out varied, but there was no doubt in my mind why.

In my time, UT and the Mines were not very forgiving of a poor GPA. Nor were they forgiving of the disturbances they (edit:they being drunks etc) created. On the other hand, both organizations would bend over backwards to help out a student that was actually trying.

bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Pixy

And yet, people get their knickers in such a twist here.

I suspect it's just something with erotic literature... back in the day of alt.sex.stories, and reading stories via a USENET reader, codes were used so people could set up their .kill file to eliminate stories they didn't want to read, to make it easier to find something they would want. So it's possible that got ingrained into the genre. It's equally possible that erotic fiction more viscerally affects the reader than does other fiction, and so content that would be merely 'troubling' in other fiction becomes 'unbearable' in erotic fiction. And it's also possible that readers of erotic fiction simply want to read stories about what they like and only about what they like (or at least only about that which they don't object to). Remember erotica is a subgenre with its own 'unwritten rules'... in most other genres, 'wish fulfillment fantasy' is looked down upon, while it's a staple of erotica.

Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@Pixy

Anyway, back on topic. Tom Holt, writing as KJ Parker, writes a series of books that would probably make readers here throw themselves off the nearest tall building/bridge. Yet, the books don't have sub-categories on the front (or back) page, warning potential readers of content that will hit you like a shovel to the face.

And even more, if one knows about Anne Rice. Her retelling of Sleeping Beauty in many ways starts like the original folktale, with her being raped. Then goes on through 4 books full of torture, S&M, more rape, gangbangs, and more.

Who at the end of the story finally becomes queen, and then strives to turn her entire kingdom over into such a place for everybody.

Or another she wrote, Belinda. I actually enjoyed the book a great deal, but it also deals with a author and illustrator famous for creating children's books. Who then begins a torrid affair with an underage girl, and releases a series of illustrations of her nude. And finally end with them racing to get married before he is arrested by the police for statutory rape.

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bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

Belinda.

Great book. I figured it as being Anne Rice's retelling of Lolita.

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Mushroom ๐Ÿšซ

@bk69

Great book. I figured it as being Anne Rice's retelling of Lolita.

Well, other than he does not have to drug her and try to rape her, did not need to groom her as she was more than willing in Belinda. And did not end with him killing the man she left him for, and her dying in childbirth.

Belinda is a good book, but it also is a book which almost forgives the claims of the groomers out there. "Oh, but they really wanted it. It is not rape nor should it be illegal if they want it."

Now realize, I am not making any decisions for or against in any way, simply stating the troubling parts that were not mentioned at all on the covers. Ironically, I picked up the book in a USO in Japan in 1988. The cover described it as a love story, and it was rather interesting.

Then about halfway through it is revealed she was 15 or 16 and a runaway. I still finished it, but got a rather creepy feel about it. That early edition was still under the "Anne Rampling" authorship. It was not until years later when I read a reprint under her own name that I knew who actually wrote it.

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Not_a_ID ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

Belinda is a good book, but it also is a book which almost forgives the claims of the groomers out there. "Oh, but they really wanted it. It is not rape nor should it be illegal if they want it."

Considering I can remember having a 6th Grade teacher at my school, fresh out of college, who several of my classmates talked about wanting to have sex with...

Or in 7th Grade hearing female classmates openly crushing on several of the male teachers. Or just in junior high and high school in general watching female students in particular be outrageous flirts with male teachers, the normal ones and substitutes alike....

I'm going to say there certainly is a reasonable probability that if they're tweens or older... They probably did want to pursue doing exactly that. They may not have properly understood what it was they were getting themselves into. But they certainly wanted it.

Grey Wolf ๐Ÿšซ

@Mushroom

I somewhat see the reactions to those Anne Rice novels, as well as e.g. American Psycho, as being analogous to story-code kerfuffles. There was a significant amount of outrage directed at those works for not warning people of the 'offending' content (and, given the breadth of content in them, it's likely something in there would be pretty offensive to a lot of people).

It's good to help readers determine that a particular work may not be their cup of tea early in the process. On the other hand, it can go too far.

I would support an author who published something on SOL which said, in a clearly visible foreword/preface/author's note/whatever: "Codes have been intentionally omitted. Read at your own risk." But, failing that, if the code covers it, there's every expectation that the code will be used properly.

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bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Grey Wolf

given the breadth of content in them, it's likely something in there would be pretty offensive to a lot of people

A friend was active in the Scene, was a porn producer, in a open marriage (to one of the main starlets in his productions)... and he couldn't make it through the books. So I'm pretty sure you're right.

bk69 ๐Ÿšซ

@Grey Wolf

Codes have been intentionally omitted.

B.O.B. did that once. I debated taking a chance on the story for quite a while... checked over the codes of every other story he'd released... and guessed what the omitted codes likely were. Sure enough, by the end of the first chapter, I was certain of the applicable codes for the story... codes he'd omitted "to avoid giving away the plot".
Now, granted, I doubt there would be many on SOL who would've objected to the uncoded content in that one case (given the apparent preferences of the readership). But back in the mid-90s, there was a serious surge in the number of stories being released without appropriate codes when the general readership of a.s.s was NOT appreciative of the content that was left uncoded (think "The Crying Game").

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Grey Wolf ๐Ÿšซ

@bk69

Of course. I doubt I would read a story intentionally left uncoded - it'd really depend on the description, scores, reviews, etc. However, I think 'caveat lector' / 'abandon all hope, all ye who enter here' is a perfectly valid choice on the part of an author - it just may cost them most of their potential readers. And, to do it ethically, you have to spell it out.

Grey Wolf ๐Ÿšซ

@Pixy

I agree that society seems to be getting more fragile. I'm decidedly on the 'liberal' side on many social issues, but I don't believe in any right not to be offended. I do think it's good to provide people with information when possible so that they can avoid material they don't wish to come in contact with, but it's impossible to warn everyone of everything that might conceivably be an issue. Caveat lector.

That growing fragility has been a theme in Michael Loucks' stories, and I think he has a lot of it right. There are also lots of other examples from both fiction and the real world.

When my kids were very, very little (ca. 2000) I read a great piece from a medical doctor talking about how fractures and broken bones were at an all-time low - and how this was a terrible thing for society, because it had been achieved by removing so much of the risk from childhood that kids were no longer learning how to perform risk analysis. Can't fall out of a tree if you're not allowed to climb a tree; can't harm yourself on playground equipment if the most dangerous thing there is appropriate for a toddler (and, seriously, I've seen many playgrounds where the 'ages 5-10' equipment is toddler-appropriate).

My kids climbed trees and played on the 'big kid' equipment and, in general, did things that are scary to a parent (I have some pictures that are still a bit nerve-wracking). They survived and thrived and are able to make intelligent decisions about risk (doesn't mean they always DO, but that's being a late teen). And I've been called a bad parent over it a time or twenty, which bothers me not at all.

But the vast momentum in society is the other way: see risk, eliminate risk. That isn't sustainable; there are major costs over time. Get rid of lead paint? By all means; there are easy, cheap substitutes and it's really bad. Get rid of tree-climbing? Much, much more difficult problem with far-reaching implications.

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Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Grey Wolf

But the vast momentum in society is the other way: see risk, eliminate risk. That isn't sustainable; there are major costs over time.

The biggest problem is the law of diminishing returns. The smaller the risks you are talking about the more costly they will be to eliminate especially relative to the potential benefits.

joyR ๐Ÿšซ

@Pixy

They appear to have forgotten that the point of education, is to be educated, not as an excuse to party.

Once upon a time, maybe...

Universities are not now and have never been altruistic enough to place the education of their students above monetary gain.

Students are provided with all the necessary facilities to eat, drink and party without ever leaving the campus. Why? Because every penny spent on campus benefits the university purse.

No university actually cares how much of a students money, grant, loans, whatever is spent on drinking and partying rather than classes.

I'm not suggesting that universities don't care about their students, of course they care, lawsuits are expensive so "duty of care", "health and safety" et al are taken seriously... enough to avoid losing in court.

Cynical? Of course, but true nonetheless.

Ferrum1 ๐Ÿšซ

To the OP, I find there is a fine line between 'good story' and 'way too much sex'.

In a recent story I read, I found myself scrolling through chapter after chapter simply because the chapters were just another sex scene. I think there's something like 50 chapters in the story, so far, and I usually like long stories. However, this one quickly devolved into nothing but sex scenes.

The problem wasn't really that the scenes were too plentiful, but that they long ceased being hot, erotic, etc. Maybe chalk that up to the author's inability. After 50 scenes, you'd better be doing something to keep the heat going, or you'll end up just repeating what has already happened - changing the names of those involved. That's boring.

Another problem is balancing your goal. Are you telling a story or are you just trying to find an excuse to write a string of sex scenes?

For me, I'm there for the story more than the sex scenes, though I do appreciate the latter. I think that the line is crossed when there are things going on in the story besides sex... but they never get addressed or see forward movement. Example: discovering that witchcraft is real and you've been put under a spell, then just going about your life like normal, worrying about prom and who to ask out on a date, etc. Or, finding out that genies exist, but pretty much ignoring everything about the magical realm even though you almost got killed by a demon.

No universe exists where "mundane" folks would discover that magic is a very real thing and simply go about their lives like they'd just discovered a new flavor of ice cream. It's just not how people act.

When you fill said story with tons of sex scenes and never really address the problem of witches and whatnot, well, it gets tiresome for the reader since that is a pretty interesting hook to have. As fun as the sex scenes might be, there should be a balance between that and the other big elements of the tale.

Of course, this only works for long stories. If you're just writing something for the spank bank and can't get past 5k words, there really isn't any time to develop the bigger story.

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