@D. Fritz
I had one early reader respond with an email entitled, "Are You Stupid?" He disagreed with a plot point and spent a few paragraphs telling me how dumb it was that a character took a particular action. Obviously, I disagreed as I wrote it and thought the action was inline, and consistent, with the character's beliefs and motives throughout the story.
I still get that on occasion. Mostly I simply politely respond, explain why I had something happen, then moved on. Most of my comments about my writing is actually right in the open for all to see. And I almost never filter it, about the only time I delete something is if it is future plot related.
Heck, I recently got the recent as a "review", and I leave it up still for all to see.
I genueinly like your storytelling, well written, certainly. But it does get very repetitive and seems to go nowhere.
9/10 for the prose, the writing craft, 4/10 for getting a storyline on track.
Well, yea. And as most who have read my comments know it is very much an "experimental story". Heck, the main character did not even put his penis into the girl he met in Chapter 1 until Chapter 26. It is rambling, it tends to bounce around a bit, I took an insane amount of time until I finally let him hook up with the "love of his life".
Uhhh, on purpose. Jokingly, I have been calling it the "Seinfeld of Porn". It goes off on tangents, you may get chapters about things that other than details repeat over and over again. But guess what? That's life. But if somebody looks for details, things do change, and those passages are showing the changes over time.
But I got lots of other stories that are more to the point. So if somebody does not like my scribblings in one, they are welcome to find another they like more.
And I laugh at "getting the storyline on track", it amuses me because part of the story was simply allowing me to see how long I could drag things out. Yet at the same time have things progress, and not simply stagnate.
We all know those. Guy meets girl, guy fucks girl, 100 chapters later guy is still fucking girl. Ad nauseum. I simply got it in my head to try something new. Even including the **GASP** main character have at least 3 hot girls hit on him and state they wanted to sleep with him, which he turned down but then had varying levels of sexual tension with afterwards.
But ultimately, we are the authors and creators of the worlds we make. I welcome input, and am pleased others enjoy what I post here. But ultimately, I am writing for my own enjoyment and sanity.