We haven't talked about writing in a while so since I came upon something I consider faulty writing I thought I'd start this discussion. I'm reading a really good story that's written pretty well. The major flaw is the author is too wordy. That means he uses unnecessary words to get his point across, but also means he repeats himself (I think that's the way to explain it).
Here are two examples:
You know what else she told me?" I shook my head no, that I didn't know.
"that I didn't know" isn't needed. Just extra words.
I wondered how much Brenda was telling Claudia about what we were doing.
"Do you tell Claudia about the things we've done?"
Why have the, "I wondered how much Brenda was telling Claudia about what we were doing"?
The dialogue already says that. Maybe he's telling what he already showed. But it's extra words that aren't needed.