Here's some more examples of what cause me to pause and drop from a story while I work out exactly what they're trying to say. Because some people had issue with what it meant in context I'm extending the quoted text with some names cut to initials to allow the author some anonymity.
1. He said, "You gave that to us in the information we received this morning. I was wondering if you really meant that. I'm curious though as to how you will protect your patents on the products if you give them the means of creating the product."
I would have expected the though to be bracketed by commas with it where it is in the original. However, I would have had the though before I'm.
2. Morning was a total riot as the kids were hyped to go to Key West, but disappointed they wouldn't be home for motocross lessons. B was whining because she would miss her music lessons. She wanted all of it, and was upset that she couldn't make up her mind as to which was most important. K straightened her out though, as she said that staying home was not an option.
Again, I would have expected to start the sentence with though.
3. K said, "He may not reach S's number for a long time. L may have one, and maybe T1, but probably not for a long time. B will be good for one or two, and T2, probably just one. N may quit with one, but will probably have another. J though wants a bunch. F will probably stop with her twins. So you figure that's only about ten. We've got them beat with only four us and only three producers." That caused some laughs.
Again I would have expected to start the sentence with the though.
4. M1 grinned at me and said, "We'll take care of M2 though, won't we?"
Again another where I would expect though at the start of the sentence.
5. "I'll stop in on the way to work this morning. I need to stop in to see D at the center anyway. Your B has been a big help over there, even though he's in school. I can't believe the contributions he's made helping D, M, and G. They are constantly coming up with new items and improving stuff we already have."
This one is exactly where I would expect to see the though.
6. "You won't believe this, S, but everyone has been out here flying them and we have the time required. We're going to get a test flight observed and tear them down. The FAA will inspect the parts and we can put it all back together again. Take one up if you want, though. I really like the coupe with the instruments. I also put a big engine in it so it climbs out fast. I think we're going to try the variable prop on it next week."
I think this paragraph is better dropping the though completely. It's not clear if the though is meant to be related to the first sentence or the sentence after the though. It could make sense if the next sentence was part of the sentence with the though and not a new sentence.
7. When we came in, C woke immediately, saw it was us, and went back to sleep.
I would have expected the immediately before woke.
8. Soon G, M, C, and his ladies took the all of the kids out to the beach. The kids were instantly splashing in the surf and exploring for shells up and down the beach. The adults were doing a good job of watching the various groups, keeping the kids that were in the water near shore.
This is exactly where I expect the word instantly to be placed.
9. Some of the little kids were building big sandcastles and other buildings that were sort of recognizable. The important thing was they were having fun. The lifeguards came around and told every one that there were shark sightings near shore and would prefer for us to stay out of the water. All the kids would go out to the edge of the surf, stick their toes in the water, then run screaming away from the ocean.
Now I would have worded that last sentence as - All the kids would go out to the edge of the surf, stick their toes in the water, then run away from the ocean while screaming. - I'm not sure what style of a run screaming is, is it faster or slower than a normal run?
This chapter had a lot of incidents in it.
Due to the way others are pulling up other references on what is and isn't allowed with the examples I'm posting, plus the frequency I'm seeing these come up, I'm starting to think they're due to a difference in the education system and what people are being taught as an OK way to use the language.
Now before people start into long and lengthy debate about are the all proper or improper use of the language I wish to reiterate that the main purpose of me bringing these up is to point out to other authors how word order usage like these can confuse readers, drop them out of the story, and how it inhibits how much they can enjoy the story due to having to take time out to work out exactly what you do mean. So, please think about the way you write the words.
typo edit and to add: I included to examples of where they did what I would expect, and not what they usually do which upsets me.