Well that's sad to hear I did take your suggestion and delete some tags
I did decide to give the story a try.
Here's some early feed back.
The story description needs a lot of work.
It starts out on a world called antar which is the midst of an all out war between full Antarians and Other more "Star Born" Anatarians what happens you ask?
To me, this implies a civil war with a single alien species that has achieved interstellar travel, humans or aliens vs humans.
Yet, after just a few paragraphs, the action has moved to an apparently present day Earth (no interstellar travel, no practical, for civilians, inter=planetary travel) and human characters (possibly modified with alien DNA).
It's one thing to not give away a major plot twist at the end of the story. It's something entirely different when the story drastically deviates from what the description indicates with in just a few paragraphs.
I would go so far as to call the latter dishonest. It fundamentally deceives potential readers about the nature of the story.
On tags so far, There is sexual activity within the first third of a page. The slow tag is not appropriate.
Read the tag FAQ, learn what the tags mean, use them appropriately. http://storiesonline.net/docs/code_faq.php
Slow There is a story and plot development before any sex occurs. Not a stroke story.
Slow implies considerable plot and character development before sexual situations are introduced.
A flash scene of an alien civil war on an alien planet before jumping to present day Earth. Then on Earth we are barely introduced to 5 characters and only given a tiny glimpse of what is happening on earth before the story gets to sex just isn't enough to qualify.