When never I see this "Thanks to cmsix for the inspiration" I can figure that usually the author will never finish the story! If YOU are really "inspired by cmsix" then for god sake finish the story BEFORE starting another "inspired" story!
A "hymen" is not inside the vigina! Rather it is a covering over the entrance to the vigina!!!! Unless you are a Total NERD VIRGIN and never been laid!
Finished your story, GOOD! NOW read what you have put on paper! Too many misspelt words, incorrect words, wrong context or words that have been omitted! Use spell check and think when you read as to what you have said!
Learn punctuation rules, example Author "Renpet" writes incredible stories, punctuated correctly and even has a section where he elaborates "why" he punciates the way he does! His stories are smooth reading!
In story writing it's the little things that count!