I was once on a forum where they were talking about using sound effects in a story. The general consensus was that it was a gimmick, cartoonish, amateurish. However, I like to do it sometimes. After all, isn't it showing rather than telling?
I'm editing my novel and came across the following:
A large man emerged from the other side. Steele raised his Glock and fired. The muffled sound of the silencer was followed by the thud of the Russian's body hitting the floor.
Steele rushed up to the man and kicked him. He rolled onto his back with a moan and a hand clutching his bleeding chest. It was one of the Russians Steele had encountered at the Yum Soo cleaners that very first time, the one whose hand had been down the front of Zhenzhen's pants. Steele pointed the long silencer at the man's forehead.
"No more immunity," Steele whispered as he pulled the trigger.
Blood spurted from the Russian's skull and spread on the floor like flowing lava. Steele left the body on the kitchen floor and investigated room after room. No one else was on that level so he slinked up the stairs to the second floor.
I had two sound effects in those few paragraphs.
In another part, I wrote:
Steele grabbed the cord binding the Russian's ankles and dragged him out of the room. At the top of the staircase, he waited for the woman to follow and then continued down the stairs. With each step, the Russian's head dropped onto the next marble step. Thump, thump, thump. Steele left him lying on the marble floor in the foyer while the woman finished her descent and sat on the stairs with her elbows on her knees and her chin resting in her hands.
So what do you guys think about using sound effects?