Chapter 23 is a much darker and more serious chapter. Sometimes that is just the way it works out.
A question was raised as to why I had the two models without tattoos, which was in the original story. Originally it was because they were a painful memory to Mike (Jack). I removed the tattoos not because of their history, but because tattoos on models are unrealistic. The two women are high-end models. As a rule, models don't get tattoos. They get paid to wear clothing, and it is the clothing that is the focus. The idea is that you buy the clothing and you look like the model. (As if! I’d be fifty pounds lighter and have a full head of hair!) As an advertiser, you don't want anything distracting from that.
Another question was why I couldn’t keep the names of my protagonist right. Sometimes he is called John and sometimes he is called Jack. In common English language usage, Jack is a nickname for John, like Hank/Henry and Frank/Francis. People often use both names.
One odd point, odd to me at least, was the use of alright versus all right. A link was sent to me that stated: “The form alright is a one-word spelling of the phrase all right. Alright is commonly used in written dialogue and informal writing, but all right is the only acceptable form in edited writing. Basically, it is not all right to use alright in standard English.” So I am allowed to use alright in written dialogue, but not when editing my written dialogue? That is just way too subtle for me! I counted 22 usages of alright in the story, all in dialogue. I am not changing them.