Thank you everyone for reading my story. It took me a while to get back to it and I have a renewed focus on improving my writing. I think my writing improved over the course of the rewrite where I feel like the last three chapters were the closest to the writer I want to be. I hope my assumption that the improved scores correlate to my improved writing is correct.
I have two story ideas on the backburner that I will start soon. It is exciting to be a reader and a writer so I will keep at it.