This is why I say, I don't have a set time for posting. My day was busy. But here they are, 3 chapters reposted to make up for the lack of new chapter. "In the Serpent's Gaze, Cost of a Bounty, and The Adventure Begins." Now that that last one has gotten so long, I may at a later date split it up into 2 smaller chapters. Meh. I'll figure it out as I go.
Truly, this man is everything I could have hoped for. He doesn't give me too many direct lines, he just points things out. He told me that the scene with the guards was too flat and he had no reason to be happy that anything bad might have happened to them. He tells me when descriptions don't move him, when I've used the same word 15 times, and when scenes fall short of inspiring. Love it. And he knows passive voice. I don't know passive voice. It all sounds fine to me. So, I hope you all like the improved chapters and see exactly why it is I'm patiently waiting for him to catch up. I threatened to torture him with puppy pictures if he takes too long. He tells me I'm not very good at this torturing thing... *small voice* all the dominant bones are in my husband....