Since posting 'The Job Offer,' I have received a lot of feedback. I have even had an extensive email conversation with one of my readers. She at first suggested that the story should have been 3-4 times longer. I am unable to come up with that much. I did add some italicized text to show her internal monolog. And changed her conversation with Mr. Miles to fit her personality better. It previously showed her as being a 'closet' submissive after she said she wasn't. The MC is an exhibitionist, or more accurately, a nudist wannabe. That doesn't mean she is automatically a submissive.
She later expressed that she would have quit by saying her safeword during the whipping. I am trying to rewrite her character to show her determination to complete the weekend to attend the party. She is desperate for the extra cash. She is unaware of her mother's involvement at this point.
Instead of the 'closet' submissive I made her out to be originally, I am rewriting her character to be an independent person desperate to make extra money to help her mother by attending this party.
I'll explain more in the story. I am also working on part 2, 'the club.' While the changes are not extensive enough to warrant a reread, curiosity does.