So most of the feedback I've been getting about the first chapter of 'Bloodthorne" has been about not being able to visualize the world. As in a completely alien world, that I've only ever been seeing in my own mind. So... Just to make a little simpler, I drew a map. Well, part of one anyway, the world inside my head is MUCH larger, and I will add to the map as I write (otherwise I'd be drawing a map for the next 2 years) and adding them to the chapters they fall into. I have resubmitted chapter 1, with a map attached. If it works, you will have a map of The Heartland Kingdoms to help you navigate through the world of Darchonaria. I hope it helps.
Cheers;
Wrath's Child