I am an avid reader, and I track stories that I've read to see what others say about them. I recently read a comment about one story where the MC is transported from his world and life into a new and dangerous world, but never looks back at what he has lost. I'm guilty of doing the same and considering the age and lack of experience of my two young adults, it needs to be addressed. Otherwise, it is unbelievable even for a story like this. They should be affected by this situation in very telling ways.
I'm going to be revamping the story from chapter one. Most of this will be adding in details to give more character to the story. I've been writing a story more like I'm writing a minimalist report. I need to correct that.
When I do re-post the story, I hope all my readers will enjoy it even more than they already do.
Thanks once again to those who have sent me feedback. They've pointed out mistakes I've made, which help me to make the stories much better.