Just posted Dominic's Heroe's chapter 1 after rewriting it.
We added some more story about how they got the money. We also added some things to it that will make the later chapters make a bit more sense. And we tried our best to find all the little mistakes that you the readers told us about.
If you're interested, please read it again and let us know if it's better or worse than the original.
Thanks for sticking with us...