I was re-reading this story and I am still not done yet.
Vulgus is a classic author - sadly he doesn't write anymore on this site or anywhere that I am aware of.
The premise of this story is rather simple:
Lori and her friend Tawney smoke pot, drink wine, and have sex while the parents are away.
A-hole brother blackmails them to do what he says.
The girls are convinced their parents will send them to strict religious school if they get found out or worse.
The premise wears a little thin because the girls essentially ruin their own reputation obeying his orders in public as he humiliates them. Anyone who is present could quite easily blackmail them too/tell their parents. Tawney's little brother helps take pictures - he could have easily controlled her as well.
In addition, they agree to this without any end - essentially he owns them forever. There are no conditions. The girls never try to bargain with him - they surrender immediately.
That being said there is always this hint that the two girls were secretly getting off on it - although it is very subtle.
"I am not saying I wanted to be an involuntary slave but his dick felt good inside me and I enjoyed the way they examined our bodies so closely," kind of comments.
*spoiler alert*
The ending was never satisfying to me. In the end, a boyfriend puts the A-hole brother in the trunk and tells him never to try it again. The girl is sexually energized now and has really come of age with her body/sexuality in a mature fashion. She has the original videos and sometimes likes to fantasize about them. The summer ends with a thud.
What it never tells us is what does Jeff do after that?
Does she ever feel like payback?
What I would like to do is consider writing an add-on. Would it be sacrilege to re-open a Vulgus story and add a part two?
Who am I to stand in his shoes and tell a story that is as good?
What would that story look like anyway?
I saw a video recently that said "There is nothing more dangerous than the boredom of teenage girls". It was extremely hot.
It suggested that beneath all the glitter and mascara are girls who want to do naughty things/daring things but have no outlet.
Thoughts: I could easily do a revenge on Jeff story but I was thinking something like this:
Two weeks later. Jeff is afraid to talk to Lori.
"I am not going to bite you Jeff. Do you want to talk about what happened?"
"No,"
"Are you sure?"
"Yes!"
"What if I told you that I forgave you?"
"You don't though"
"Yes, I do. I even liked some of what you made me do,"
"Really?"
"Yeah, I still watch the tapes sometime. I am shocked that I did them now, but it was kind of wild"
"Would you do them again?"
"Well, I think my reputation is ruined enough that the threat of seeing me in a porn video is probably not going to scare me into being your obedient little slut again."
"What would?"
"What do you mean?"
"I mean like if we just pretended I had a video that was much worse,"
"You mean like robbing a bank or something?"
"Yeah, or doing crack and turning tricks in nigger town"
"Jeff don't say Nigger. That is horrible"
"Fine, doing crack and turning tricks in African American town"
"I am not sure that is any better. Let's say that I agreed. Would you let me earn the tape back after a certain amount of time? The last time you made it sound like forever."
"What will Laney say if we do this?"
"He can help you blackmail us and keep it fair,"
"Mom and Dad aren't going on vacation anytime soon"
"One of the things that scared me the most was how you'd make me your slave while they were here. If we can keep it going under their noses for two weeks then I might be willing to do it again sometime?"
"What about Tawney and Lynne?"
"I could ask them if they are down?"
Too lame? Would it not work if Lori is into it? Would it be better if Jeff strikes back and tries to control Laney/scare him off?
https://storiesonline.net/s/60550/my-brothers-revenge?ind=1
This is the original if you are interested.