It was pointed out to me that the site has an age limit of 14 for sexual activity, due I am told to it being hosted in Canada. The girl in the story was 12 in order that the man would get a life sentence (UK) otherwise other elements wouldn't work. So I have re-written with the age omitted - if you work back from the end it is 14 and complies with SOL's requirements - so that you can use your imagination as to what age the man thinks she is. I've also made one or two other alterations and additions. I was going, at this point, to insult the folks who only scored it 3,4,or 5 but I can't be bothered.