Ok. that's enough attempts at (poorly) writing rhyming.
So, health has it's ups and downs (rhumatoid arthritis flared up, combined with a pinched nerve in the hip, was all kinds of fun), but for once I want to talk about something positive instead of something negative.
And that's the new story I just submitted.
I have had about a dozen false starts over the last couple months, trying to write a story. Both chapters of an existing work, and something new. I am my own worst critic of my writing (as you can probably guess through these blog entries).
I would start to write something, get bogged down in the details, contradict myself a dozen times over, try to edit, and finally just go on a deletion filled rampage and quitting out of frustration.
So, I tried something (k)new with this story.
I didn't think about the story before I put fingers to keyboard. I let the internal editor inside of me go on an extended coffee break, setup a direct line between my brain-muse and my fingers, and started.
At first, this story really worried me. It felt.. raw... emotional. I don't know if it's because of the health issues I've been through, but by the time I got to the end of my main character's written stream of the thought, I dreaded opening that hospital door. In the mindset I've been in, I wondered if the woman/girl on the other side of the door had cheated on him, and now was dying, or what have you.
Instead, it's the exact opposite. It's not the ending of life, it's the beginning. Instead of the hurt of betrayal, it is the confirmation of togetherness.
I think it's good stuff. But there was this whispering voice in my subcocnscious, that was saying "You know this is crap, and you know you can't write well any more".
I sent it to my pre-reader/editor (as I noted previously), and said "I can't tell if it's crap. Let me know what you think."
He liked it.
Not only that, it was the story that he had to do the least amount of editing on recently for me.
So, now I offer it to you guys. I open it up to your comments, good, bad and indifferent. I want to know what you truly think.
The only thing I ask is that you don't judge it solely on it's flash-story length.