I've done a rewrite of this chapter that is extensive enough that I felt that a repost of the chapter was in order rather than waiting to complete the story which is somewhat in hiatus due to the depression that overshadows my life....
Thank you all in advance for any feedback you have.
To those who continue to read, thank you very much. To everyone who is frustrated by this being a premium story, I'm very sorry, but I cannot continue to offer my work for free.
Tori
AKA Anne
Why premium? Simple, I'm hoping that I will feel that this story is good enough to go over to book appy. It isn't close to finished, though I'm over 13,000 words ahead. If you ask nicely, I may be willing to send you the text I've got finished currently, and I'm going to explore both pareon and discord.
I must gain income. Maybe I won't from this book but I also must start somewhere. VA disability is not enough to keep me from starving to death.