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From: cwsawyer
To: THodge
Subject: Re: The Adventures of Tim Bodge - Chapter 61
Message:
Chapter 59
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Chapter 60
From Tim’s desk, Shanae stood and walked toward the bridge. Taking one last glance at the work she had been doing, Shanae headed for the bridge.
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From Tim’s desk, after taking one last glance at the work she had been doing, Shanae headed for the bridge.
Chpter 61
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Regards, Zululook The steaks have been changed to read stakes. SOL reposted the chapter.
“The story of Ella
Author’s notes: The language of the goblins is squeaks. Ella’s is broken English, and I have translated it for easier reading.
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