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So I'll schedule them up to come out, two chapters per day or so, once I get them back from Robin.
Let me know in the comments how you think or want the story should develop or end!
https://storiesonline.net/s/20191/sixteen
Everyone think that Sixteen ended too soon?
Yes, everyone seems to think that Sixteen ended too soon!
Okay Okay I can add a few more chapters. It'll take a few weeks so be patient.
The feedback I've been getting since Sixteen started posting is awesome! Thank you all!
The FINAL CHAPTER of Sixteen posts in just a couple of hours - 8pm EDT, whenever that is - and I'm hopeful people who like the kind of story I write will like the ending.
I particularly liked UncleDraggi's discussion about whom he hoped would get together with whom, and the whole romance and love aspect to the story; he posted that comment just as a chapter finished on a cliffhanger, and at that point in time it looked like the whole love triangle thing could go the way love triangles usually do: badly! Hopefully he liked the next chapter.
Early comments seemed to fixate on the unfeasibility of the barcode scanning. Well, really, you just have to google opencv barcode scanning like Sam did! Its actually within the realms of possibility these days, and there are tutorials so even young computer students like Sam can throw it together without understanding how it actually works. FWIW, I've seen some cutting edge camera stuff that would wow everyone and make you see how straightforward barcode scanning really is.
Anyway, I only wanted a get-rich that was borderline realistic and not like the usual plot twists where kid is born rich, or kid wins lottery, or is time traveler who corners the silver market... Them getting rich was just a vehicle to more interesting possibilities...?
All my stories are written first-person from the perspective of the boy, but the focus is on the heroine and how wonderful she really is. If you like that kind of love story, you might like some of my other stories? I've got some nice feedback from other stories recently, from people I suspect found them only because they started reading Sixteen.
I kind of have started a list of ideas for future stories on the forum: https://storiesonline.net/d/s5/t5448/diverse-ideas if you want to give encouragement and direct the subjects and styles I tackle?
I blogged a couple of weeks ago after I published Monsoon that I had two story plots that I was working on: Emily and The Heist.
The story about Emily, the mistress of the manor, was extremely fun to write. I deliberately spiralled into farce at the end. My favourite lines are "Paris? Who the fuck is Paris?" and "why, it looked like he meant to win!"
And whilst I like my own stories such as Monsoon and Alice and Lizzy rather more than the average reader here perhaps does - I think they are all the most awesome stories ever ;) - Emily's story seems to have landed better. If the public like her, they may want more of her?
And luckily I have become so fond of Emily and especially the teachers that I'm not about to stop! And so I have decided to rework my The Heist plot to use the same cast: Romeo and Emily becomes now the first story in a series. The second, which I've just started on, picks up straight after and has the working title Emily and Clyde.
Like all my stories, Emily and Clyde starts in my mind by assembling some of the sketches I've daydreamed up into something that can be woven together as a consistent plot. Then I find the sketches get tainted to fit how I imagine the characters acting: for example, the heroine of The Heist was to be nerdy girl walking into a restaurant like Pretty Woman, and now it's ... possibly ... Emily instead. (Note to self: maybe Will gets some assistance from a nerdy version of Ruth this time?)
I guess I could alternatively rework Romeo and Emily into the first chapter(s) of à longer story, but I've opted to test out the site's series functionality instead.
Read the first part here: The Manor Series
This blog post is just blatant advertising for my latest story Monsoon. Its a story about a boy going to Thailand and discovering that sex, even good sex, isn't love. The description of the Thai nature, I think, fairly accurate. You really can still go find beach bars on beaches like those described. You might even find real love?
I don't want to spoil the tender love story (although its super-predictable so perhaps there is no such thing as a spoiler) but I have had a few comments expressing disappointment at the ending. I got that feedback for Distance and Mid Summer Madness too, so I guess I'm not very good at endings?
Anyway, in Monsoon, it was important to me that I end with the heroine being an equal and not rushed into a marriage. It was also important that the protagonist not succumb to the temptation offered by the very nice and very beautiful girl who is not used to being resistable. This is probably the only story on this site that involves an offer of a threesome declined? :) Please mail me suggestions for better endings.... ;)
I have another couple of stories in the pipeline- "Emily" and "The Heist". As usual I think of the characters first and try and imagine what they want in life and how they'd get it and how they'd respond to different scenarios. I then imagine some fun scenarios and events, and then try and tie them together to weave a story. This may be why I'm so bad at endings? Anyway, these two stories are much the same although one is a bit funny and the other is a bit too soppy. I hope you enjoy them; they'll be out in a couple of weeks if I can't get the shortest before the weekend.
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