I've edited Chapter 2 to greatly improve it for those that are interested in checking it out. As usual, massive thanks to Nemo for the editing advice!
I've submitted it for posting, so it should pop up soon!
Any feedback is great and let me know if you like the updates to the chapters.
Thanks
I have spent a good chunk of time working with an editor to clean up the story, Kylie. We worked together to really improve chapter 14 from the onset, and I think it's a huge improvement over the previous chapters.
Huge shout-out to Nemo, they are a phenomenal editor!
Considering that, we've also tackled chapter 1 to improve it and, I think, greatly improve the pacing and fixing a ton of inconsistencies. Eventually, I'd like to bring all of the posted chapters up to the same level.
I would love any feedback anyone has on the new version of chapter 1!
Thanks