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I'm still a "newbie" writer, having only started publishing at the beginning of the year. I've gotten a good number of compliments about the quality of my writing so far, so I was quite surprised when I got a message here from a reader telling me that Chapter 7 of my story A Submissive Sibling was repetitive and not up to my usual writing quality. I took a look and used an analysis tool and was horrified to find I had used the phrase "I could feel" 28 times in one chapter.
So it seems I developed a writing tic and was absolutely blind to it. I checked a few of my other recent chapters and found that it occurred there as well, but not quite as badly.
All this to say that I absolutely appreciate the reader, Robert, pointing this out to me. I hope anyone reading my work will help me catch things like this. I want to be a better writer and feedback goes a long way towards helping me on that journey.
Malcom Walker
Nashville, Tennessee
I honestly thought I was going to finish my book Submissive Sibling with this latest Chapter 8. I did my best, writing a huge 10,000 word chapter that turned the story in a new direction. I'm grateful to the response so far, with almost 1,200 folks downloading the new chapter in a little over 24 hours. The score for the story has even crept up a little.
In the end, there was some more story that needed to be told, so I ended this new chapter on a small cliffhanger, and will likely finish with Chapter 9, but there is some more story past that is currently tickling the back of my mind, so it might go another two chapters or so. I did outline this story, so this is new stuff creeping up on me as I write.
Malcom Walker
Nashville, Tennessee
My SOL debut erotic novel Taboo Tapas - Savor the Sin has been released on zBookStore. It features new illustrations and a free preview of Taboo Tapas II - Savoring Sofia!
I've completed uploading the edited versions of Chapters 1 through 4 of my story "A Submissive Sibling".
I ended up adding several thousand words to each of them, which does not significantly change the story, but adds more detail and removed a lot of the "tell" and replaced it with "show." There's probably no need to go back and read them again unless you are a big fan of the story. If I had to pick one to tell you to read again, it would be Chapter 4, which features a lot more of the parents.
Thanks to everyone who has read it, and especially to those who have left me feedback.
Malcom Walker
Nashville, Tennessee
I consider myself a new author, having only started to push stuff out over the last few months. I've gotten a lot of good responses about my story "A Submissive Sibling" and I'm very appreciative of that.
I recently pushed Chapter Six up, which ended up being a monster of a chapter. I paid careful attention to the editing on it and I think it ended up being a good chapter. I have the outline done to finish the next two chapters, which will finish the story.
However, since my goal is to eventually offer this for sale as a book on zBookStore, I want to make sure the entire story is as clean and edited as possible. I went back and looked at Chapter One closely, and noticed several instances of "telling" and not "showing". So I gave the chapter a very careful edit and rewrite and it ended up going from 2300 words to over 4,000 words. I also finally came up with a decent illustration for it.
If you've already read Chapter One, don't feel the need to go back. It does add some new material, but doesn't change the basic story. I do think it will read better and make more sense as I also go back and do the same to chapters two through five.
Malcom Walker
Nashville, Tennessee
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