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I found a story on my Drive, that I hadn't published and didn't remember at all (I had a stroke a few years ago and now my memory has weird gaps in it). So I read it as though someone else had written it. I found it very involving, I mean I was gripped! Of course it has my values, tensions that matter to me, and the style was very readable for me. Then I found earlier versions so I knew it was mine.
And now my question is how well my writing style translates for other people. How readable is it? I know a few people skim it, but they might skim every story. It could be a bit polarising, but if you feel like making a comment I would really appreciate it. The name has changed since the initial post, now it's Flight into the Forest.
Perhaps it's time to continue Spinsters in Space. Also a sexier title perhaps. The situation is a remote planet, and the only life is benign plants and our four women with the bodies of small teen girls, who can do genetic engineering in the spaceship they've landed. Story wise, it's a lot of freedom!
They've been thinking about developing another girl, and also giving themselves cocks. They've already increased their sex drive. So, a story, with tension and an ending, that's not tooooo obvious or absurd...
It's a statistical necessity though. It doesn't mean half my readers don't like the story, it's just that once the average score has settled, it doesn't change much. Each new vote could be either the same as the average, or a bit above, or a bit below. Who knows! My reader might have liked it, or not.
Home Invasion was inspired by the TV series The Power, in which women acquired the ability to fire electric shocks from their fingertips. It removed the physical dominance men have always had. This has quite a fundamental effect on make/female relationships, so in this story the male is old, and losing strength, while the girls are super fit. And of course he can't bear to reveal the truth, that now he's weaker than girls, so he can't summon reinforcements either. Luckily everyone is good-natured in this story even though, coming from different eras, and different backgrounds, they have plenty to clash about.
Hmmm, the final chapter doesn't seem to have been too satisfying, judging by the voting! So the question is whether I need to extend it a bit, to bring the dickgirl paradise thing more to life, or to backtrack and make it less extreme and perhaps a more believable/less ridiculous. Any thoughts?
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