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According to one of my editors, readers have difficulty knowing what I intended to write and seem to be stuck with the actual words I wrote on paper (or input into digital pixels on a screen).
Mostly what I will add will be additional explanations of what Dana's 'associates' expect from the people they give a do-over to. I also want to explain what was to happen to all of Derek's stuff when he left.
I have written the last two chapters, but will work on the early chapter re-writes first. I will then post the final two chapters together.
I thank my editors, BarneyR and Bohica.
Feel free to read this as light material of no consequence. But for those who care, I did address serious subjects.
-PTSD is described, including an explanation of a main symptom (hyper-vigilance).
-The nature of man, especially his ability to become evil when social restraints are absent is described from my perspective.
-I tried to discuss safe society as a false illusion, but I don't know how successfully. An erotic story is not the best vehicle for this, but, I thought it was worth the effort. Note: This is an attitude I developed when I was sent to Iraq.
-If it is not obvious by now, a key theme is the effect of abuse and/or life threatening situations in psychological and behavioral terms.
For those who don't know, an armor officer is a leader of tank units. And a tank is not any metal vehicle. A tank has a cannon, easily identified by a very large tube. Yes it is rather phallic. Cleaning the gun tube after firing, almost mimics sex.
I do accurately portray the spirit of armored warfare. It is different than the mindset of light infantry (soldier on the ground with a rifle). Foot soldiers rely on being unobserved and dispersed. Tanks excel at concentrated firepower (opposite of dispersed) in a fast, mobile platform (as opposed to boots). No disrespect to the infantry, we simply have different roles and capabilities. We are most effective in combined arms teams (infantry and tanks working together).
Where is the story headed?
Relationships, interesting people, and sex will dominate. Some military/espionage/law enforcement type action is necessary for the story, but I won't know how much space it will take up until I write some and see if I like it. My experience in these types of missions is pretty typical of army officers since Operation Iraqi Freedom began. That is to say, some tactics and techniques I received extensive training (such as a four man stack), but there is a lot I will extrapolate from what I have learned through talking with people I have encountered and reading. As a last resort, I will research and fill in the gaps from novels and movies.
Thank you for the encouraging feedback.
I appreciate the encouraging feedback messages many have sent me.
I want to offer a special thanks for my editors: BarneyR, RollingRomanticDaydreamer, and Bohica. Without their help this story would be unremarkable. I do think this chapter is much much better written than the Chapter 1.
According to the feedback, readers did not know where the story was going. I think this chapter answers many of those questions.
I do want to provide two disclaimers.
1. The main character does not exhibit any signs of PTSD referenced in Chapter 1. I wrote the story this way intentionally and Chapter 3 will explain that disconnect.
2. The main relationship in this story is sexual but not romantic. I realize that some may find that unbelievable. However, one of the reasons I wrote this story is to explore this kind of relationship.
I am inspired by two of my favorite authors on this site. elsol's "A Master's Ring" describes a society of submissives serving masters. The "siblings" in this story explicitly adore, value, and worship the "brothers", but they are not in love with them.
Likewise, I have been reading bluedragon's "An Ordinary College Sex Life" to refresh my memory of the story before the next chapters come out in the following weeks. In his story, the main character enjoys lasting, deep and meaningful relationships with sex partners in his family and the "adopted" Evans family (total of around six). And he is ever only in love with one of them at a time, if any (It's complicated). Also, the dom/sub relationship between Ben and Kim has also provides opportunity to analyze power exchange relationships.
Of course there are too many inspiring stories on this site to list them all.
I do think my story is very different from the others and that the authors will not feel that I have copied their work in any way. Certainly, my goal to to approach these topics from a different point of view while adding my own ideas, attitudes, and experiences.
Please note that I will be changing the sex content code from Some Sex to Much Sex. I don't know where the boundary is between the two, but I think I am crossing it.
Respectfully,
CPT Derek
p.s. "CPT" is the military abbreviation for the army rank of Captain. I hope that is not confusing.
This is my first story. I welcome any constructive criticism, but I do hope that you keep in my that this is my first attempt.
In this story I want to explore a power swapping relationship based on the submissive's psychological need after a short life-time of betrayal and abuse. That she chooses to submit to a man who values people creates internal conflict for her master.
I hope to eventually address some elements of PTSD and related topics involving combat stress and normal reactions to traumatic life experiences.
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