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LupusDei ๐Ÿšซ
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I was fucking Dita for nearly a year by then. She had two best female friends, they both had boyfriends, and one Saturday night they whisked us all to a dance club in the small, but proud and ancient hometown of one of the guys (~12k current population, far end part of a 80mi long agglomeration along the big river). It was a new venue, the main DJ was his school pal, that sort of thing. Only there I learned that Dita too had attended the local school for a couple of years (commuting there with no apparent logic, but stranger things happen in life, perhaps parent's relations could explain it). Long story short, she too knew a lot of those guys, and was friendly with them, especially with one remarkable specimen I realized I had already heard about from her. And she, let's say, swiftly went outside the approved parameters space with him, at a phase in our relationship I considered exclusivity as important.

Even so, all I wanted was clarity, but the situation rapidly escalated, all the way up to one too sharp a move from a mass fight. And she went with him. And her friends accused me for causing the disturbance. Obviously overstayed my welcome and already more drunk I probably should have been, I stormed out of there mad as a bat from hell. Come the early summer sunrise, I found myself squatting on the riverbank hurling pebbles along the mirror smooth water of the hydroelectric plant lake, with still over a hour to kill till the first train back to the capital.

Laura, she walked along the flood dam right out of the rising sun, clad in much too light a sundress for the chilly Sunday morning, but with not a touch of makeup on her face and energy of someone fresh out a good night sleep. Not for a lone boat making waves out in the lake and the sleeping town somewhere we were alone for a mile, so of course she had noticed me too. Forty feet away she stopped.

"John? What are you doing here?"

"Waiting for you," I said, standing up. It was already truthful by then, and even on the big scale of things, absurdly logical.

She skipped to me, and we hugged.

It's just such perfect opening in my mind. The encounter is improbability on cosmic scale, whatever is told next can't be meaningless. No, neither was stalking the other, neither knew other could be in that town, both are likely there by unplanned chance for a time measurable in hours. John hasn't met Laura since before he even knew Dita. They haven't really be lovers, I think, but if not then only very nearly not, and they may have long and varied dynamic between them. And yes, there's a lot of symmetry.

(Say, Laura was a queen bee in school, everyone had a crush on her, so nobody loner Johnny wasn't in any way special even if he might try to claim he had crush on her before her fame. But then Laura was dethroned by a contender, declared a slut and unpersoned, and John was one of her very few friends then, platonic by choice to not take advantage on her, and also, he might have had a girlfriend or four, now himself a social force to recon with. And they went different ways, not to hear or see from each other till now.)

Dita will want John back, in fact she will met him later the same day with like, "where did you disappear?" Playing offended he left, but willing to forgive. She doesn't want the other John (okay, that name probably has to be changed) as a longterm relationship although the one quickie was absolutely on her bucket list, and now checked off.

The guys may think differently and may even attempt a trade on her, for rather disastrous results probably as she's not a girl to accept such. She may go all "you can't dump me, I have nuclear weapons" girlfriend nightmare, or not, I really don't know.

ETA: but yes, as I see it, it's a small town, small country, small world dynamic where everyone knows everything about everyone, everyone cheats on everyone, in love and business, and can't really get very far from each other even by jumping oceans as they are tied down by very long roots of many generations and tangled histories.

However, I don't know what the story is all about at the end either... yet, at least.

...and if someone is short of a cosmic chance meeting with totally different content... yes, it's probably done in principle uncountable times already.

(I would neither confirm nor deny it may have happened.)

Reluctant_Sir ๐Ÿšซ

@LupusDei

One problem I see is this:

The encounter is improbability on cosmic scale

Is belied by this:

it's a small town, small country, small world dynamic where everyone knows everything about everyone, in love and business, and can't really get very far from each other even by jumping oceans as they are tied down by very long roots of many generations and tangled histories.

You would need to make it clear she was the exception to the rule, and why.

Even so, if I were to download this story... The second sentence in the intro would have caused me to stop reading and move on.

She had two best female friends, they both had boyfriends, and one Saturday night they whisked us all to a dance club in the small, but proud and ancient hometown of one of the guys (~12k current population, far end part of a 80mi long agglomeration along the big river).

I know, it was a quick precis; a mind dump of an idea. I wouldn't expect to see it in the finished work, but that sentence had me shaking my head. :)

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LupusDei ๐Ÿšซ
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@Reluctant_Sir

One problem I see is this:

The encounter is improbability on cosmic scale

Is belied by this:

it's a small town, small country, small world dynamic where everyone knows everything about everyone, in love and business, and can't really get very far from each other even by jumping oceans as they are tied down by very long roots of many generations and tangled histories.

You would need to make it clear she was the exception to the rule, and why.

You mean, the radio silence between them? I don't see it as unnatural, and it's been two-three years. Neither is tracked by yellow press, it's not yet long enough to met at kid's school. If they didn't attempt to keep contact it was lost. A track, it may even be less, one, order or both may have heard vague third hand rumors about the other even, but if so, it only adds to the confusion.

They met in a random place off a sleepy province town around 80 miles from the closest spot either would imagine the other to ever be (and they knew enough for estimates on their expected orbits, like college attendance, parents hometowns), around 4:20 AM on Sunday morning.

While both were visiting said town unplanned, and for time measurable in hours. Why he's there is explained. Why she's taking that walk as if it was the most normal thing to do, I'm not entirely sure, but the events they attended are unrelated.

that sentence had me shaking my head. :)

Yep, quite typical "not a writer" me when left unchecked, and that was edited for compactness if at all.

LupusDei ๐Ÿšซ
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@Reluctant_Sir

The encounter is improbability on cosmic scale

Quick and dirty. Imagine two people from New York. High school schoolmates and friends. They know each other's life history well, and vaguely the current ways. They haven't talked, nor actively sought to talk the past couple of years, partly, even probably, exactly because of how complicated their previous relationship was. They know rather specifically neither had any tangible connection to Kingston.

Yet, one Sunday morning at sunrise they randomly met at the Charles Rider Park Boat Ramp, Kingston, NY. Both visiting Kingston for the first time last night for unrelated reasons, and not planning to stay the day. Both wouldn't have known they would ever be there a day before.

The break in their communication is actually immaterial to how unlikely it is. That their capital city is only one million, and whole state two, doesn't help much.

StarFleet Carl ๐Ÿšซ

@LupusDei

The encounter is improbability on cosmic scale

Not really. My Dad went to High School in a small town in Indiana. I can't even begin to count the number of times he'd run into someone he went to high school with while we would be on vacation out of state. As in, standing in line at Disney World in Florida and someone would walk by and say, "Hey, Charlie!" And this is 35 years AFTER getting out of school!

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LupusDei ๐Ÿšซ
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@StarFleet Carl

Well, yes, Standing in line at Disney World, at an airport anywhere (even say, Nepal), even on a legitimate trail in national park, yes, all those are easily explainable, legitimate, almost mundane chance encounters eliciting surprise nowhere like that.

Encounter in the middle of nowhere, a place that is not a destination in any way on itself, is way of all the destinations they have consciously had even while visiting the town, a place both are drifted to at random with no prior plan, at an implausible time of the day... I see that as different. While it may technically not differ so much from catching someone at a random highway gas tank in a different country, even that would psychologically seem orders of magnitude more likely.

Besides, the timing. Randomly encountering anyone from the aggregate of schoolmates anywhere people are around is one thing. Encountering the one old crush with lot of history within couple hours from being dumped by a girlfriend who went with her own old school crush, is something else.

Yes, it's not a perfect impossibility. Just extreme improbability. But that's why it's interesting.

akarge ๐Ÿšซ
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@LupusDei

Re: improbability of that meeting.

In 1980, I was in Frankfurt, Germany in the army. On one particular day, I ran into a guy from my hometown (pop about 9k) who I hadn't seen in 10 years. Same high school class. He was just buying a hot dog for lunch at our bowling alley at the same time that I was. In the army, but just passing thru. Not assigned to the base.

One hour later, I ran into ANOTHER guy from that same class. He was in the air force and was assigned as a liason nco at a "war game" that I was also working on.

One year later and I am in college in Washington state. I was a member of a science fiction club. One young kid, who i had seen before, walks into our club wearing a Greek Fisherman style cap for the first time. I suddenly recognize him, and his cap,from a war game convention that I had attended in Wiesbaden, Germany, one year previously. I jumped up and yelled "Wiesbaden!"

He looks at me and says "Rhinecon". He had been wondering where he knew me from. Long shot here was he lived in Massachusetts, but was attending college in Washington.

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