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In the early stages of creating a story world, looking for input

Freyrs_stories 🚫

Just in the early stages of trying to create a world for a story / universe that will cover 15-20 years, maybe a little longer.

the general premise of the world, currently just titled 'Dolls' is the progress of a boy of 14 to mature adult of maybe 40ish depending on how far I write it out. it will go to at least early 30's.

he inherits money from his wealthy uncle as well as a mystery device that has many 'features'. the device is intelligent and learns. it also has the ability to morph it's shape for themes under development. the first ones are so that it can communicate with the boy, the second allows it to hypnotize people. this is where his journey starts in creating 'dolls'. he starts by 'modifying' the girl next door and controls her, bending her mind to his will. as he amasses his empire of money and technology.

he develops ways to change the females in his life to be more doll like. like I said starting with hypnotism and progressing through methods going as far as genetically rebuilding and reprogramming them as fully custom dolls. I need to brainstorm many intermediate steps. there will be successes and failures along the way.

both are important to the development of the story. one failure in particular leads to 'attractive women' who are female drones his own private slave workforce. I am building up many of their properties at the moment.

what I'm looking for in periodic discussions to help me with this development process. and maybe a pointer or two towards writers I can look to for inspiration and ideas to stitch together a path from simple hypnosis to fully rebuilding a body at a cellular level.

thanks in advance to anyone who can help.

REP 🚫

@Freyrs_stories

Try posting in Story Discussion. It is probably better suited to the intent of your post.

Freyrs_stories 🚫

@Freyrs_stories

I'd love to hear from a few of you on this. Laz has moved this here to try and get a few responses

happytechguy15 🚫

@Freyrs_stories

I sympathize with your request, but the premise is something I tend to avoid reading. I am only a reader. You have put much thought into this, and I see you've not had a response in a couple of weeks.

Mind control: Again, just my own thinking, I do not like to read of a person being mind controlled. Does the persons original personality go away and be replaced by an unthinking zombie? Or become a "yes-man" and "i love you" character? However, I have liked the stories of rlfj's that I have read, so I tried his war of crystals. Even tho' the mind control turns the women into "I love you" slaves, somehow the story overcame my objections.

Body change: Swarm universe by thinking horndog does body modifications by nantites directed by an artificial intelligence.

This is just 2 examples I can think of so far. I wish you success in your writing!

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