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A sugestion, if I may

cave jug

I'm ranting on another thread "predictably" flogging a dead horse, so I thought to do something we may all benefit from, suggest rather simple thing.

I'm in a middle of a reasonably interesting tale,do not want to abandon it because of a small detail, really.

There are two verbs that have been used 376 times! REALIZE and RECOGNIZE. The English language, with all modesty, is one of the richest languages know to us.

For my way of thinking it is not just a sign of poor vocabulary, but a sign of laziness as well.

So I propose, to all word-smiths if I may, next time when you write or rewrite a story, make an effort and use a wast range of verbs that are available to you and substitute for those two above.
I venture to say, we'll all be richer for it.

Cheers.

richardshagrin

@cave jug

wast range of verbs


Or a vast variety of verbs.

Replies:   cave jug
Dominions Son

@cave jug

There are two verbs that have been used 376 times! REALIZE and RECOGNIZE. The English language, with all modesty, is one of the richest languages know to us.


I think you overestimate the number of fully equivalent synonyms for those two words by a wide margin.

A dozen each at most. I would hardly call that vast.

with all modesty, is one of the richest languages know to us.


You might want to pay more attention to your own use of the language before you start criticizing other peoples use of it.

Replies:   cave jug
Switch Blayde

@cave jug

There are two verbs that have been used 376 times! REALIZE and RECOGNIZE


Interesting. I would think those two verbs would be very rare in a story.

Replies:   cave jug
Ernest Bywater

I suddenly realise I recognise the formation they're moving into and adjust my forces to combat it.

- sorry, folks, the thread just screamed for it.

Replies:   graybyrd  Dominions Son
graybyrd

@Ernest Bywater

- sorry, folks, the thread just screamed for it.


No, you're not sorry (grin). Admit, EB, you're having too much fun!

(Sorry I missed that 'Get Smart' reference in another thread; it was witty, but it failed to trigger old recall in an aging brain.)

"I realize to survive and scrutinize, thus best to recognize their tactical formation, I'd best set about to utilize, thence to vaporize, the scanalyzer attachment on the MK-69 destabilizer cannon.

Replies:   Ernest Bywater
Ernest Bywater

@graybyrd

"I realize to survive and scrutinize, thus best to recognize their tactical formation, I'd best set about to utilize, thence to vaporize, the scanalyzer attachment on the MK-69 destabilizer cannon.


Just hit them with a Photon Torpedo, that'll light up their day for them.

Dominions Son

@Ernest Bywater


- sorry, folks, the thread just screamed for it.


Are you trying to steal richardshagrin's mojo?

Replies:   Ernest Bywater
Ernest Bywater

@Dominions Son


Are you trying to steal richardshagrin's mojo?


nah, just having a moment of irreverent irrelevancy - someone turned on my irrelevancy drive and it's going into overload.

cave jug
Updated:

@Dominions Son

It was not a critique, just an observation and suggestion. I thought "to realize" and "to recognize" are verbs?

Blow me down, "know" should have been "known". I do often make mistakes, you right, I need to pay attention.

Replies:   Dominions Son
cave jug

@richardshagrin

A fine point, but You get what I am on about.

cave jug

@Switch Blayde

If I get permission from the author, I'll name it. Is that acceptable?

Replies:   Switch Blayde
Dominions Son

@cave jug

It was not a critique, just an observation and suggestion.


Observations and suggestions should be worded far more diplomatically.

Your tone was quite hostile and putting realized and recognized in all caps was obnoxious.

All caps is considered to be shouting on internet forums and as such is considered rude and will almost always detract from whatever point you are trying to make.

I thought "to realize" and "to recognize" are verbs?


They are. Verbs have synonyms too. The number of alternate verbs that express the same action/event are far more limited in number than you suggest.

I do often make mistakes, you right, I need to pay attention.


Very often. You in the quote should be you're or you are. When you start making suggestions about how other people should write, the rather significant number of mistakes you make detracts from your credibility.

Switch Blayde

@cave jug

If I get permission from the author, I'll name it. Is that acceptable?


No, I don't want to know the story. I was just looking at the verbs and wondered how they could be used so many times in a story.

Replies:   Crumbly Writer
Crumbly Writer

@Switch Blayde

No, I don't want to know the story. I was just looking at the verbs and wondered how they could be used so many times in a story.

It's generally better to not name names, unless people specifically ask about it. However, I immediately asked myself whether you were referring to one of my own stories (since they're all about discovering hidden truths and feature a LOT of realizations). As such, you may want to post a private note, slightly softer in tone, to the author in question. It's entirely possible he's not aware of how predominately he's using the terms, simply overusing words emphasizing a central theme.

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