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red61544 ๐Ÿšซ

Months ago, I swore that I'd never start another story until I saw that it had finished. I have to learn to keep my promises. I'm in the middle of two different stories, each of which had been posting with regularity. Now, neither has posted for weeks. I know that life interferes, but this is freaking frustrating!

Replies:   The Slim Rhino
Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

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The Slim Rhino ๐Ÿšซ

@red61544

Take it from someone, who does that involuntarily due to ADHS. Sometimes it's even good to leave a story dormant. At some point you'll get an inspiration and the next chapter will be better than you ever expected. Not posting for a while is better than forcing out a chapter that ends up being half-arsed and forced.

Readers are more forgiving than we tend to think.

Replies:   Vincent Berg
Vincent Berg ๐Ÿšซ

@The Slim Rhino

Sometimes it's even good to leave a story dormant. At some point you'll get an inspiration and the next chapter will be better than you ever expected. Not posting for a while is better than forcing out a chapter that ends up being half-arsed and forced.

On the other hand, when authors get flak for not finishing a story, they tend to dig in their heels, insisting each letter demanding an end means another couple months of no story.

It seems there's less antagonism and anger when stories are posted once they're finished. At least if you're posting as you write, having a clear idea where the story is going, so readers get a feeling they're moving somewhere, rather than just more of the same (no sense of a final resolution).

BlinkReader ๐Ÿšซ

Uhh...

If someone is willing to spent his/her time and energy to write something you may read for free (or little fee that is helping this site to survive) than you must understand that not every story is going to be posted regularly (or be finished).

That's the way things are working here (and on a lot of other sites).

When we are writing about unfinished stories - what all of you are thinking are best unfinished stories on this site?

And what stories you would like to see finished any way (maybe even voting for and suggesting to active authors to write something similar to endings to long ago abandoned and unfinished stories you like very much)?

Replies:   Vincent Berg
Vincent Berg ๐Ÿšซ

@BlinkReader

And what stories you would like to see finished any way (maybe even voting for and suggesting to active authors to write something similar to endings to long ago abandoned and unfinished stories you like very much)?

My favorite unfinished story (and I can't imagine how Gina could ever climb out of the hole she dug herself into, now now anyone else could 'rewrite' her story) is "Spitfire and Messerschmitt".

Replies:   Bondi Beach
Bondi Beach ๐Ÿšซ

@Vincent Berg

My favorite unfinished story (and I can't imagine how Gina could ever climb out of the hole she dug herself into, now now anyone else could 'rewrite' her story) is "Spitfire and Messerschmitt".

I've tried-and failed-to write for my own pleasure the "old-fashioned wife-swapping" beach weekend promised in the last published chapter. Sigh.

I've written what is essentially fan fiction (the "Micole" stories, for example, and the "lost chapter" from "My Mother's Son" that jackieoh kindly let me post), but I can't see continuing someone else's unfinished story, no matter how much I liked it.

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Replies:   Vincent Berg
Vincent Berg ๐Ÿšซ

@Bondi Beach

I can't see continuing someone else's unfinished story, no matter how much I liked it.

I mentioned it (continuing another author's story) simply because it's been suggested by a couple readers on the Forum recently, so I wanted to cover the various options, rather than suggesting anyone actually do it.

BlinkReader ๐Ÿšซ

I didn't ask that somebody continue another author story, I just asked what unfinished story you would like to see finished.

I'm voting for Don Lockwod story "Rewind" (https://storiesonline.net/s/42289/rewind).
Second in my wishing list is "Bow Valley" by Barbe Blanche (https://storiesonline.net/s/66725/bow-valley)...

solitude ๐Ÿšซ

@BlinkReader

Tycoon springs to mind, perhaps because it has been mentioned on the forum recently.

Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@BlinkReader

I just asked what unfinished story you would like to see finished.

https://storiesonline.net/s/60663/intermitent-predator

Vincent Berg ๐Ÿšซ

@BlinkReader

I'm voting for Don Lockwod story "Rewind" (https://storiesonline.net/s/42289/rewind).
Second in my wishing list is "Bow Valley" by Barbe Blanche (https://storiesonline.net/s/66725/bow-valley)...

Barbe Blanche died of cancer years ago, part way through the story. While ill, he tried writing other material--not feeling up to continuing "Bow Valley"--but he never shared them with me.

Since we both started on SOL at the same time, and wrote in a similar style, we'd often bounce chapters off each other to get the other's feedback. If there was anyone I'd consider finishing a story for, it would be Barbe--especially since his family doesn't even know the story exists and no one would ever challenge my finishing it. But ... I don't have the familiarity with the London countryside, and especially with the English lock system, so I wouldn't feel qualified to tackle it.

@Richard

I'd vote for Pete, a young mans story by magi.

It'll never happen. He still pretends he's going to finish it, despite dedicating all his time to posting his 'picture of the day' to his website. He's focused on promoting his website, rather than on writing, so I doubt he'll ever finish more than a couple chapters.

Replies:   BlinkReader
BlinkReader ๐Ÿšซ

@Vincent Berg

Thank you for info about Barbe Blanche.
Frankly I suspected to hear this sad news long time ago, but it's always sad to hear news like this.

Whoever did not read his story should do it, it's worth reading even unfinished...

richardshagrin ๐Ÿšซ

I'd vote for Pete, a young mans story by magi.

details stolen from Magi's page, below:

Pete: A Young Man's Story by Magi

Description: A young man passing into adulthood. His adventures and his feelings.
Size: 4983 KB ( ~ 944,924 words)
Type: Incest
Sex Contents: Much Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, mt/ft, Ma/ft, mt/Fa, Mult, Consensual, Romantic, Heterosexual, Fiction, Incest, Mother, Sister, Light Bond, Gang Bang, Group Sex, Orgy, Safe Sex, Oral Sex, Anal Sex, Masturbation, Fisting, Sex Toys, Squirting, Lactation, Water Sports, Cream Pie

Review by orangeade [other reviews by orangeade]

Reviewed: 2011-06-16 - (Review Updated: 2011-06-18)

A good rule of thumb is that one shouldn't review a story that hasn't been finished. Will the author be able to maintain the quality of the story through its conclusion? Will the author even get to the conclusion?

But every rule has an exception or two, and one of those is Magi's "Pete: A Young Man's Story." It's a coming-of-age tale that just keeps on going and going, with no resolution in sight and no reason to think that the author, after eight years of regular posting, is looking to give up on it.

It's not one of the best written stories at storiesonline, not at all technically perfect, and it's cast of characters is so enormous that sometimes even Magi can't keep them straight. But it's a page-turner and addictive like few other serials you'll find.

Pete Baker is everything you'd expect from a coming-of-age protagonist. He's handsome, but doesn't really realize it. He's fiercely protective of those he loves, almost to a fault. He comes from a solid upbringing and has a drop-dead gorgeous younger sister. He gets sexual instruction at a young age from a mature partner, but seems to also have a natural aptitude for pleasing the seemingly endless string of beautiful girls and women who pass through his life. He's the quintessential "good guy." He's the true Golden Boy.

And his life is never boring. He hops from one critical moment to the next, saving lives, befriending those in need and usually making the intelligent decision. What starts out as another teen/high school story keeps getting bigger, from Vegas showrooms to Hollywood studios to the world of big business ...

And all without an apparent exit strategy . . . "Pete" is like the little seedling you plant on Arbor Day, and come back a year later to find that it's blocking out the sun. Characters and story lines are constantly added, with most of them remaining in play. The 130+ chapter story, as of the summer of 2011, covers only one year in story time. And Magi continues to add 10 or so chapters per year.

In other words, this is a story with which you'll find it's still worth getting involved. There's plenty to read now, and every reason to imagine it will keep coming.

The question is whether or not Magi has an end game. The clues that have been left suggest that it's, at a maximum, only half over, but the real mystery that needs solving is the same as in any story of this type: With whom will Pete end up? Kristen, the politically-connected singing sensation? Amy, the sweet and brilliant "sister" figure who appears to be waiting for him to s0w his wild oats? Sam, his first love, whose heart he broke, but who remains in the periphery? Or one of a couple of dozen other candidates? Will we ever know? Does Magi even know?

There are no guarantees with "Pete: a Young Man's Story" except that it moves at an engaging pace and you'll keep wanting more. It may never get finished, but the ride along the way is a real pleasure.

Plot: 9 | Technical Quality: 8 | Appeal to Reviewer: 9

Review by 54vette [other reviews by 54vette]

Reviewed: 2004-09-02

I've been following this story since it first got posted.

This is a magnificent story. it's superbly written and has to be up there with the likes of Nick Scipio's "Summer Camp" series.

The author not only writes well, but his imagination is as boundless as Joe J's in asmuch as he writes in characters that sound very familiar to us and yet are people we wish we knew when we were growing up or better still, wish we were like.

'Pete' for all intents and purposes is a normal, healthy, physically and mentally, above average, All-American boy who, at 17, can pilot his own plane and has dalliances with, not only, beautiful and sexy teenage girls but, grown women as well.

Aaahhhhh, my kinda man!!! :)

Magi doesn't bore you with this one. If anything he keeps you riveted. You'll find yourself waiting for him to post more chapters. The story is that good and destined to be one of the 'classics' in erotic 'literature' :)

ENJOY!!!

Plot: 10 | Technical Quality: 10 | Appeal to Reviewer: 10

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