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I Should be in a Do-Over because...

gridiron2393 ๐Ÿšซ

Why should you be the person blessed with a do-over? And what would you do to change the world?

Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@gridiron2393

Why should you be the person blessed with a do-over?

Shit arse lucky is the only reason. Although I've played with the idea of someone getting a do over as a punishment, they try to change things but can't.

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Zom ๐Ÿšซ

@Ernest Bywater

Shit arse lucky is the only reason.

Not really EB. There is a story as a trilogy of 'books' of which Book 1 is hopefully soon to be published (probably here) where the do-over is intentional and managed (within reason) and multi-staged. Quite a new form of the do-over.

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Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@Zom

hopefully soon to be published (probably here)

That explains why I've not seen anything along those lines, yet.

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Zom ๐Ÿšซ

@Ernest Bywater

That explains why I've not seen anything along those lines, yet

But you will have now :-)

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Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ
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@Zom

But you will have now :-)

Zom, you know too much and you know what that means will happen to you?

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Zom ๐Ÿšซ

@Ernest Bywater

you know too much

I didn't think that was possible, unless you mean it in the Cosa Nostra sense. I should be OK, just so long as I don't say too much ...

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Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@Zom

I didn't think that was possible, unless you mean it in the Cosa Nostra sense. I should be OK, just so long as I don't say too much ...

Just watch out when the CIA comes for you!

CIA = Committee to Intimidate Authors.

sejintenej ๐Ÿšซ
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@Ernest Bywater

Shit arse lucky is the only reason. Although I've played with the idea of someone getting a do over as a punishment, they try to change things but can't.

There is a story of a young girl waking up in a boy's body and facing police charges.

Waking up at the same time is a young girl (previously an older man) who had previously been found guilty of those same charges when he had been a boy. He was able to advise the now boy (Einstein) how to get off successfully

Ernest Bywater ๐Ÿšซ

@sejintenej

There is a story of a young girl waking up in a boy's body and facing police charges.

The story tension, as I see it in what I suggested, is for the person wanting to not make the mistakes and cause the problems they did on the first time through. They set out to make things better, but fate thwarts them at every turn and they get angry and frustrated about not being able to fix things.

As I said, I've toyed with the idea, but way too much else going to even think about it at the moment.

demonmaster62 ๐Ÿšซ
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@sejintenej

Great Story! I thought the ending was kind of lame, but the story itself was awesome!

If the original question really was "I should be in a do-over because...?"

I always wanted to know if I would have been the Rock Star I was planning to be, had I not Joined the Navy, and then gotten married right out of boot camp (high school sweetheart). I hated every day of both of them. The service and the marriage. I would never want to change my beautiful children and grandchildren for anything, nor would I ever give up on seeing parts of the world I never would have seen otherwise (The Rock of Gibralter is just one of many highlights) I still would love to see where the "other" path would have taken me.
edit- the name of the story mentioned is "Once More with Feelings"

Is it a good reason, I don't know or care. I just wish I had the chance to do it.

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sejintenej ๐Ÿšซ
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@demonmaster62

I always wanted to know if I would have been the Rock Star I was planning to be, had I not Joined the Navy, and then gotten married right out of boot camp (high school sweetheart). nor would I ever give up on seeing parts of the world I never would have seen otherwise (The Rock of Gibralter is just one of many highlights)

To answer several people, if you stop Hitler being born, Mao winning Chine for the Communists, Pol Pot et al be assured that some other people, equally evil, would have come to the fore - your efforts would have been in vain and perhaps YOU would have been regarded as evil.
Seeing the world? Rock of Gibraltar I have lived and worked there. Gibraltar had the highest suicide rate of any UK forces base because of the Levantar - it was warm like Florida but so humid the streets were wet in the mornings(far more so that I experienced in Florida summer) and you didn't see the sun for sometimes weeks on end. Some of the CIA's list of most dangerous cities are ok to great to live and work in but .......Everywhere has its good and bad sides so it is best to go as a tourist.
I have been very lucky and from what I have seen of various places and situations I am not sure I would want to come back.

Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@gridiron2393

And what would you do to change the world?

Probably nothing. Most do-over's are about the person making their own life better. Few people would be in a position to change the world to any appreciable degree even if sent back to their early childhood with their adult knowledge.

Capt. Zapp ๐Ÿšซ

@gridiron2393

And what would you do to change the world?

Change the world? I don't know if it would be possible. Maybe find a way to prevent certain politicians from advancing in their careers.

I would be more likely to attempt to change the events that shape who I am today into something better.

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BlinkReader ๐Ÿšซ

@Capt. Zapp

Change the world?

In first sight it may be easy as give condom to Hitler's father or birth-control pills to Mao's mother, or just plain kill Caesar, or (add what you want to do to influence past)...

On other hand people who have most influenced our past (either good or bad) are just tinny part of what we see as top of big iceberg of society of their time.

If there was not Hitler or Stalin there would be someone other, maybe even worse for human race ...

And good deeds is also hard to reach - what do you think would an arabian doctor in eight or nine century done with penicillin - or say cure for cancer (do not forget - they were a prime culture then!)?
There must be reached some kind of treshold for something like that to spread enough.

So think very carefully before you start writing about your idea ...

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Capt. Zapp ๐Ÿšซ

@BlinkReader

Change the world?

You only copied part of what I said which changes the meaning.

Change the world? I don't know if it would be possible. Maybe find a way to prevent certain politicians from advancing in their careers.

I was saying that changing the world would be a very difficult task and, with the exception of changing the path or eliminating of certain political careers, very unlikely to happen.

In first sight it may be easy as give condom to Hitler's father or birth-control pills to Mao's mother, or just plain kill Caesar, or (add what you want to do to influence past)...

Since none of the people you mentioned were alive during my lifetime, the scenarios you suggest would not qualify, at least in my case, as a 'do-over'.

BlinkReader ๐Ÿšซ

Thank you. And sorry for misunderstanding

This again show me that I'm already blind :(

Perv Otaku ๐Ÿšซ

From what I understand about the genre, I don't really see the appeal. Or rather, I don't understand how it's actually an entire genre. Was the first do-over story that good that it spawned so many imitators?

Reliving your youth would be a horror to a lot of people, tedious at the very least, and foreknowledge of events isn't really an automatic ticket to getting laid a lot.

Of course any silly old plot can be made compelling by a skilled writer, so maybe I'm wrong.

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Dominions Son ๐Ÿšซ

@Perv Otaku

Reliving your youth would be a horror to a lot of people, tedious at the very least, and foreknowledge of events isn't really an automatic ticket to getting laid a lot.

The idea isn't to relive you youth exactly the way it happened the first time, but rather the chance to make different choices for decisions that you regret.

The best do over story ever is the movie Groundhog Day.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Groundhog_Day_%28film%29

He has to do one day over and over and over until he get's it right.

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Perv Otaku ๐Ÿšซ

@Dominions Son

The best do over story ever is the movie Groundhog Day.

A short-term time loop with multiple repeats is one thing, reliving your past is quite another. Most people wouldn't remember enough details to be useful on a day to day basis. I assume the typical protagonist in such stories also have far more past regrets than average in order to make the story worth it.

A better movie comparison might be Ashton Kutcher in The Butterfly Effect, which was a worst-case scenario but does make the point that the more you change in your own past, the less useful your memories become as events unfold in an increasingly different manner.

Anyway, I was just curious since I hear about "do over" stories here so often but it's not a term I've seen used anywhere else.

bob_v_07 ๐Ÿšซ

List of do over pls..

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TeNderLoin ๐Ÿšซ
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@bob_v_07

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red61544 ๐Ÿšซ

@gridiron2393

I have a simple reason for wanting a do-over: I'm drawing very close to the end and I'm not ready to quit! The real question to me, though, is if I were offered a do-over, would I want to relive the life I've had and make changes, or would I want to start as someone else and try something new? I could make a good case for both.

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