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"incredible changes" by Dead Writer

sunkuwan

I am on chapter 5 at the moment and am kinda "meh" about it.
He has some kind of electric power but where does the story go?
I looked at the chapter names and he is still in the hospital in chapter 20

Also, I am currently not in the mood for the sensible guy that has every female falling for him trope. The scene in the bath in chapter 4 between him, his 14-year-old nurse and her mother was just cringe-worthy.

BlinkReader

Sorry - no help there.
I earlier tried to read it, got to chapter 18 or 20 and couldn't make my self to continue any more.

Maybe someone has courage to read it further and can enlighten us...

Replies:   StarFleet Carl
StarFleet Carl

@BlinkReader

I earlier tried to read it, got to chapter 18 or 20 and couldn't make my self to continue any more.


I got a little further than that, but gave up on it as well. I kept thinking, it's got to get better and/or become more believable. Unfortunately, after the bus stuck in a snow drift scene, I quit reading it as well.

karactr

I remember starting it. I remember not really liking it. I don't, however, remember it.

I may get a wild hair and revisit, but am stuck in Daze in the Valley. I'm waiting for it to get as funny as the author's prefacing note.

sejintenej

I did get a bit further where the location changes but it remains heavy

Replies:   sunkuwan
sunkuwan

@sejintenej

Thanks all, I will drop it for now

Tw0Cr0ws

I got to where the psychologist blamed him for his world view which was formed by being shunned from an early age by all in his age group, a shunning caused by a malicious adult.
He had no other experience.

Couldn't make myself read any more.

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