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posidous

Wished he allowed messages. But understand his reasons. Reason would like to write to him. I like this story, even though it took like forever. The writing is clean and the story believable. When he describes something it s not two page long, it is sharp and quick, just like I do in real life. I hate when an author spends my time writing a chapter about the inside of a house and barnyard. They are things, not meaningful information or ideas. Hope this gets to Englishman. I rate the story at "Great"

Dominions Son
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@posidous


I hate when an author spends my time writing a chapter about the inside of a house and barnyard. They are things, not meaningful information or ideas.


It's possible for an author to go too far the other way, and the reader is left with no idea at all, what the setting is, or what is the spatial orientation of the characters in a scene is in relation to each other.

Personally, while it's possible for an author to go too far even for me, I generally prefer more scenery over less scenery.

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Purplecat

@posidous

I must agree, the story was really good. Reading his blog about being set into a tailspin by negative feedback, I can understand why he blocked us, but I also would love to tell him how much I enjoyed his work. He had to have done a boatload of research to write the story, and I feel he should be thanked for the work put into writing it. Margie

gmontgomery

I hope our landlord will point Englishman to this thread so he can find out how appreciated he is.

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Wheezer

It's an excellent story, and I'm looking forward to Part 2. I would also like to thank him for his efforts. It's a definitely different take on the time travel/do-over story genre.

hawker

I really liked the effort and in particular to the comment about ("my words") the 25 year old "Equine Rump" from Queens who assumed too much power on Nov 9th / 2/20/2017.
Looking forward to the sequel.

sejintenej

@gmontgomery

I hope our landlord will point Englishman to this thread so he can find out how appreciated he is.

Just in case Englishman does see this thread I add my appreciation. Even the first paragraphs were welcome and gripping.

sejintenej

@Dominions Son

the reader is left with no idea at all, what the setting is, or what is the spatial orientation of the characters in a scene is in relation to each other.

Having read more, Englishman has inserted history as a person living at the time would have seen it - Centre Point and the press reaction to it in Chapter 7 is a case in point. However there are just a few bits which point to Englishman's background - in some instances Granddad does not always behave as a person of his standing would behave. His "whoop" when Finn passes the 11+ is one clue. Such a man would have considered the success as normal and not worthy of great celebration - a verbal "well done" would suit.

Nevertheless an excellent story so far and one which expresses English thought pretty accurately

gmontgomery

@posidous

The first chapter of the next installment is up.

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