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April 17, 2016
Posted at 10:37 am
Updated: April 17, 2016 - 2:27 pm
 

Lisa - Read it!

One of the many good things about joining the Swarm authors' discussion group is that we read, edit, proof, and comment on stories in progress. As such, seeing a gem develop, and actually having a small part in it, is a gift.


I loved Zipper D. Dude's Lisa from the start, and watching it improve with each iteration was enlightening. Yes, the story is very dark, but so is much of Anne Frank's diary. I would not put Lisa on the same level of writing, but it is an amazing look into the head of a suffering young teen. http://storiesonline.net/s/13672/lisa


Zipper has taken on tough, dark views before - notably in The Concert - and the story ratings are lower than I personally think they deserve. http://storiesonline.net/s/10240:i


I often tell my friends that I'm long past wanting books and movies for adrenaline or social issues, I want to be entertained. Period. You may not like Lisa, but this is one you should read anyway.


If you do, you should really give Zipper the courtesy of a comment on why you like or dislike it. A lot of thought, effort, and talent went into this one, and he deserves the feedback. And if you drop me a line about what you think, that would be good too.


I should note, that the first upload of the story was mangled towards the end. The second upload was fine, so if you read it shortly after the initial submission yesterday morning, you probably should take another run at it.