It's been almost a year and a half since I first posted my story here. In the meantime, I got back to writing, but went all the way back to the beginning.
The main story and plot haven't changed, but I've added subplots, took out lot of 'telling' in favor of 'showing' - in general, what I believe is much better writing and a more enjoyable read.
All the vote counts were reset so I can get a fresh appraisal from the readers.
The first three chapters are complete and I'll be releasing them about every ten days. The editing for chapter four is nearly done, and then I'll continuing the rewriting of the later chapters.
The story is outlined to the end, and many scenes have been written. I will try hard to get the work out and completed in a timely manner.