One email got my attention today, it was mentioned that at times my stories read like an outline. They do not bring you into the now. Even more telling is my greatest critics comment (My wife),she likes to visualize the story as she goes. She has to work to hard for most of my people to come alive. From Chapter 4 on I hope you will see an improvement. I only took up writing three weeks ago. This was a result of a long driving trip where I started to make up and share the story with my wife. She challenged me to write it down. I think she is working on the idle hands are the devils tools since I am taking the winter off.