A number of people (a large number) have pointed out my spelling and grammar errors. I can do better on the spelling just by calming down and not posting until I have reviewed it and ran multiple spell checks. But the past/present tense on some of the verbs is driving me crazy. So I am rewriting the whole thing in a third person perspective. That seems to make the tenses easier to me. I had a couple of people offer to edit it but one got the writing bug bad and has posted several stories since (good ones, too) and the other never emailed me back. So for time being I am going it alone. I should have the whole story rewritten in a couple of weeks and I can get back to adding to it. Plus I got hooked on Roustabout's Arlene and Jeff and have been reading instead of writing. But I got the first three chapters done today so I hope to get it all straight soon. Hopefully this will make it a better story.