To everyone that has sent me feedback, thanks. I really believe that the only way to get better is to practice and have someone critique you. Someone pointed out to me that my writing would be smoother and sound more (be more) correct if it was in first person past tense. I was trying to write in first person present tense but it didn't sound right even to me. I wish sometimes I lived in a more metropolitan area as I know that sometimes local colleges and adult learning centers have workshops on writing. There are great things about living in the boonies but also large drawbacks. I probably won't have time to post anything else before the 25th, so I hope everyone has a Merry Christmas and Happy New Year. Happy Holidays to everyone at SOL.