I decided to release the stories on the regular site instead of for the contest.
I couldn't stop tinkering with them and I went over the size limit for what they needed to be (^_^)
But of the two stories I like Story two far better than Story one, but I still liked Story one so don't get the idea I hated it for any reason.
I think once folks see Story two they'll understand.
But I also doubt I'll do another story of this style again though (^_^)