Thanks for all the great feedback everyone!
The most common critique I received was that the prologue was too short. I totally agree. But I posted it on its own, rather than attaching it to Chapter 1, for two reasons:
1) As Chapter 1 hasn't been edited yet I thought it better to post something short rather than nothing at all.
2) It gives me an idea as to whether there will be interest in the story or not. I didn't actually expect anyone to read it so I spose I'm doing alright so far.
Anyway, I promise Chapter 1 will be much longer.
It also occurred to me that Aussies speak a lot differently to the rest of the English speaking population. A fact I realised when I was in New Orleans earlier this year. I said 'if you're cold then put your jumper on' and everyone laughed at me and then proceeded to mimic me. It was kinda hilarious.
So rather than changing the way I write and losing the 'aussie-ness' of the story, I've made an 'Aussie Speak' list that you all can refer to in case I say something totally weird.
Hugs n Kisses,