Finally having gotten a decent storyboard written, I have redone the prologue, and posted Chapter 1. Ive had a few people ask about the prologue. The prologue is written from the point of view of a being, that is just beginning to become self aware, and has very little intelligence, IE unreliable narrator. Please take that in mind when reading it. The constant use of the word "thing" is her attempt to classify items and ideas she has no words for yet. A blanket, to someone who has never seen nor needed one, would be a thing, until someone told her "we call that a blanket"
Hope you like the story, I should be posting a few more chapters in the near future, once I have the story fully laid out.
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