I have been getting a lot of feedback about this story and I really like the tips I have been getting. You all are making a better writter out of me. A lot of people are saying that the story would be better in first person. I am thinking it as well. However that is not how the story comes to me. I am considering two options. I can open this up to a universe and start another story in the same "verse" or I can just start another story about something else. Either way that story will be in first person so I can see what I can do with it. Let me know what you all think. Thank you too all my readers and thank you to cmsix (my fav author).