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... by the same crook aroslav reported.
It's one thing to provide constructive criticism but the notion that SOL writers should be held to professional standards is ludicrous. As authors, we write for ourselves, but we post stories here for the enjoyment of others.
These days I don't really have enough time or energy to do any writing, but have even less to scrutinize any number of small errors. I have lots of stories that will never see the light of day for this reason. My hope is to eventually finish Mike and Malok (and I'm on the last chapter), but I'm not sure this will ever happen.
I'm thankful for talented authors like Jay Cantrell. Keep up the good work, brother.
I recently read Coaster 2's excellent Yakima and was impressed with the way the author used internal monologue. I then read a criticism of the story for too much of this and not enough dialogue.
When I read a first person story (past) that is heavy on dialogue, I usually wonder if the narrator has an eidetic memory (I guess every character in fiction has this, lol). To me this just does not ring true. It is easy for character narrators to report what they thought and how they felt at a certain point, but not necessarily remember what they said or had said to them (unless the scene was particularly memorable or it was an important conversation).
The other thing with first person story telling is that it allows the narrator to share his/her most intimate thoughts with the reader without having to "show" the reader by having to force a piece of dialogue (like the famous "tell the bartender your woes" cliché/mcguffin or some other father confessor type).
I thought that Coaster2 gave us just enough dialogue to keep it interesting, while keeping the narration heartfelt and believable.
I've caught a few problems that came from posting the wrong version of the story. I've also re-sent the epilogue to ensure that the story is listed as finished. There may be some other problems and if I catch them, I'll fix them.
At any rate, thank you for reading and I hope you liked the story!
I just submitted the Prologue for this story and plan to submit the rest of the story this evening. As this is my first time submitting a multiple chapter story in one setting, please bear with me. The rest should be up tonight (or first thing in the AM if I miss a cut-off). Hope you like it!
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